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Twelve years experience as a professional hit-man, and one hundred and twenty seven kills to my name. You would think that by now i was used to seeing dead bodies. Thats what i thought until last night.

In all my time as a hit-man i have never had a problem like last night, and I've had a lot of problems. I have had people that are so stubborn they just wont die, I've had people walk in half way through a job. I've forgotten the tools of my trade(more than once), I've even got the wrong guy on one occasion. My first year i even shot a guy eight times and left him for dead, just to find out that he survived. i had to finish him of whilst he was in the hospital. But last night that really was something else, I've never seen anything like it and i don't want to anytime soon. 

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seldom "Yep bfd. I've been meaning to continue but I kind of ended up with so much going on. Will add another branch - have been thinking about it. A good way to get people to add to stuff is of course to add to other's stories - get yourself known and all that. :D I have been adding like crazy, both on stories I added and other's. Think now a lot of people know who I am."
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surreal78 "It happens - people tend to get distracted easily. Easiest way to generate some interest is to post something fresh in the story, of course. :)"
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bfd "9 days away and no ones added, its depressing."
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bfd "don't all cold blooded hitmen have a sensitive side?????"
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bfd "great chapter, really like the first paragraph. i love to read a bit of violence."
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bfd "i'm sure nick will tell us if we are out of line."
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seldom "Hey bfd - lol thanks. Yep could be gruesome. The story isn't tagged as mature though and I think we may be pushing the boundary line on that one already - not sure. Should we ask Nick if it can be changed - or if we're still ok?"
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bfd "I've set you up perfectly to have lots of blood and gore. the sick sweet metallic smell, and the wet slimy stuff i slipped in has to be blood doesn't it??????
It's a shame its just the two of us adding posts, i think if other people were to get involved the story has a lot of potential. not that im displeased with the direction its taken.
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bfd "sorry that was not the plot. just some ideas one for each new branch. front door closes as neighbour comes in. the noise is a small child, or you enter the bathroom and find a false wall. etc. didnt even think about it as a plot just thought if people have ideas they might write a branch"
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bfd "when did i????"
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seldom "argh - don't give the plot away! ;)"
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seldom "Thanks! Lol but if I was that great I would be a published writer already. We're all learning here. Yeah, I'd love to do a course. Maybe I should look into that too - it's a good idea.
Mostly, I think grammar is hard to learn in an academic way. The best way is to read an awful lot, and examine the way writers put things as you read, thinking about how and why they've written it like that. It gets easier with practice. I try to do this myself.
Not sure I could correct an entire book (don't have the skills required) - although lots here will offer pointers.
Like lots of people I'm time poor. Unfortunately not cash rich tho lol.
Thanks bfd :D
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bfd "Thanks for the advice seldom, really appreciate it. talk about beginners mistakes. lol! i just get so involved i forget spelling, punctuation and grammer. The most annoying part, is that my stories pretty much suck when i read chapters like yours. you can tell straight away that you know what you are doing. i'm going to look into a creative writing course. you put me to shame. i'm in the process off writing a book based on my experiances as a doorman/ bouncer. it would be great if you could find the time to read what i have written, correct mistakes and add your own ideas. obviously when it's published and is a number 1 best seller it will be co-written by the both of us!"

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