We've been waiting...
George was curious, naturally. And after recent events, that was no surprise. The old man who stood before him seemed to know about George, how much, George didn't know, but was about to find out.
"We've been expecting you for some time now, George, we thought you'd have found the door before now, with that creative mind of yours."
"We?" Asked George. "Where's everyone else?"
"Oh, around, but don't worry about that, the important thing is that you're here now."
"And where exactly is here?" asked George.
The old man laughed "If I told you, you wouldn't believe me, and I know what else you're thinking; no, you're not dreaming, this is real. We're in a parallel universe, one which has been created from your mind."
George looked at the old man skeptically
"Is this some sort of joke?"
"No, no joke, I'm serious. Why do you think that wall appeared as soon as you said it? Oh, and hero? Don't flatter yourself."
George thought about this, then a thought formed
"OK...so, if I say 'And then our hero found himself in a large clearing, deep in a forest', then grass and trees and the such like will appear?"
But, the moment he said that, indeed, trees did grow all around him, and grass beneath his feet grew, then there was all the sounds of a forest, filling his ears.
George looked around in amazement, and then decided he rather liked this; he was, in effect, a god. And he liked the sound of that.
"So" George said to the old man "How do you know so much about me?"
The old man raised an eyebrow
"It's rather self-explanatory" he replied, but it was obvious George hadn't quite grasped the full idea here, "As we're formed from your imagination, then we've been with you since the day you first thought of us."
George looked at the old man, a memory coming back
"Oh, now I know who you are, you're the old guy I was going to use in one of my books, but didn't, for various reasons. But yet, you still exist....how?"
Sighing, the old man rolled his eyes.
"Because even though you didn't use me in the story, you still thought of me, imagined me, and the such like, therefore I have some sort of existence."
"Right" said George "But how does a parallel universe form from my imagination?"
"Ah, wondered when you were going to ask that" said the old man
"You might want to think up a chair, this could take a while"
Looking at the old man, George then said "So, our hero then found a couple of chairs, for him and his companion to sit on"
Sure enough, two chairs appeared, and George and the old man sat in one each
"And I told you, stop flattering yourself. Hero? HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!"
George looked at the old man, not sure what to say
"Um, anyway, are you going to tell me how this parallel universe formed?"
Stopping his laughter, the old man looked at George
"Ah, yes, ahem, well, it's rather complicated...."
The old man looked at George, a sly smile forming, and an odd glint in his eye.......












All together now: "Slacker!""
Anyways now I'm going off on a tangent. Very well written, you put a lot of effort into your craft. I wish I cared as much as you when writing on this site, but to me all this is just a game to hone my skills.
When it comes to real writing, I always edit the draft at least ten times before letting anyone....tangent again.
Great story, I'll post a branch when I get a chance, and don't worry I will care a little."
Agree writing is fantastic. It sort of reminds me a bit of Tom Holt - only better to be honest. Don't know why youre still here Fal because everything you've donme so far is publishable. If you've been sending it off then you've been really unlucky. And if not why not!!!
I know about this, I worked in the book industry for a couple of years.
:)"
However, I can't hold it against you - most times (at least in my case) it takes months before I release something I've written to the public. There's always something to correct in a story. Always.
Good work though. Loving everything so far.""
Although it was my intention to accelerate it to make the character seem desperate enough to do what he did.
Still fairly new to writing, so bear with me and please, don't hesitate to criticize my stories/branches/chapters in detail. It helps me tremendously.
Thanks Pinch :)"
Thanks for your candor."
Otherwise, once it gets going, the tension lifts ncely again, and it's a very tantalising cliffhanger."
Also, there are some odd turns of phrase that stick out awkwardly. Not sure this effort has helped the story."
I appreciated the feedback. Thanks again."
Please continue, Fal, and I'll try to get into your mindset to write another chapter too."
Love the intrusion of the weird into the everyday setting. Great characters being built up too.
:) Intriguing definitley"
There will be more!"
I've book marked the page, and look forward to your next installment :)"