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Seeing the Unseen

George wandered back to his cubicle yet again, his mind a-flutter with thoughts and speculations and ruminations. Something was gnawing at him, something that wouldn't quite come to the fore. He knew that if he kept trying to force it, it would just keep slipping away. So, he tried to relax and let his thoughts flow.

It was not an easy thing to do.

In an effort to at least bring some order to the proceedings, he created a new Word document in his personal folder and starting typing in all the things he knew about the door.

First off, for some reason, he was the only one who could see it, or at least see it continuously. He could get other people to see it, but they would forget all about it in a very short time. He had first established that with Sharon, but he had later discovered that Bill, Fiona, Warren, and Dan had also lost their memories of the door.

He knew there was some kind of room behind the door, as none of the rooms surrounding it seemed to extend into the space immediately around it. Not a big room, but a room nonetheless.

He knew somebody was using the room, or at least someone wanted him to think they were using the room. The piece of string he had placed on the narrow part of the doorknob was gone the next time he checked. It was unlikely that it had fallen off on its own, as he had moistened it before placing it there, so someone had either removed it or inadvertently dislodged it.

There was also the fact that the door looked odd. It was almost like he had to unfocus his eyes to see it clearly. And that was something he was not good at doing.

Then there was the comment that Bill had just made. "Write a book about it." It was a completely offhand comment, but it had struck George oddly. For some reason, it seemed important. And George was beginning to get a sense of why.

George was indeed a writer. Which meant he was often engaged in using his imagination. And the practice of writing tended to exercise that imagination. Perhaps George was uniquely positioned to see things like this door. That was not to say that he was the only one on the floor possessed of imagination. But he used his imagination in a certain way, and perhaps that allowed him to look at things differently.

Then a cold thought ran down his spine. Perhaps he had crossed that thin line and was now imagining things that weren't there. Perhaps his imagination was taking him beyond the realm of sanity. Perhaps he was losing touch with reality.

He shook his head. He couldn't allow himself to go there. Besides, if he really were going mad, he wouldn't be doubting his own sanity; he'd be even more sure of it than ever.

He'd had a feeling, down deep, underneath his stomach, ever since hearing Bill's comment. The feeling was becoming a hunch, and George was slowing realizing that he knew what he had to do. He wanted to rush right back to the water cooler and take action, but he knew he should wait. He'd gotten enough odd looks from his coworkers over the past few days to last him well into his dotage. He could do without raising any more eyebrows.

Difficult as it was, he waited until after five o'clock, when most of his coworkers had already left for the day. He made a good show of putting away his things and packing up his briefcase, but he moved slowly, and as people passed his cubicle, saying "goodnight," he waved at them and responded in kind.

He put on his jacket and stepped out of the cubicle, ostensibly heading for the elevator, but in reality checking the area to see if anyone was still around. Only a couple of people remained, and they were moving in the same direction as he.

Pretending he had forgotten something, George snapped in fingers in feigned annoyance and headed back to his desk. Once there, he removed his jacked again and sat down. He thought he'd wait a few more minutes and then try his next experiment.

He only saw one more person as he headed for the water cooler. "Working late, George?" came a voice from an office as he passed.

"Yeah, just gotta finish up one thing before I go," he replied, not even slowing his pace.

He arrived at the water cooler, heart racing. He knew he was on to something. He could feel it.

He stood facing the door, trying to keep his breathing even.

"You're caused me a lot of sleepless nights," he said to it. "And a lot of strange looks from my coworkers. I'm putting all that to an end right now."

The door, for its part, seemed unmoved.

Taking a deep breath, George stepped into the middle of the corridor, stopping halfway between the water cooler and door, and steeled himself.

Slowly, he relaxed his body and tried to look through the door.

He'd never been good at those "Magic Eye" puzzles, but he knew how they worked. Don't look at the page; look past it. Let the eyes unfocus until they focussed differently.

And suddenly, there it was.

It was the same door, but it looked... different. It looked... more real. More pronounced. It was difficult to describe.

The doorframe seemed to jut out further from the wall. The knob seemed to stick out further from the door. The colors were deeper and richer.

George smiled. He knew he was almost there.

Without even really thinking about it, he stepped up to the door and reached up to the top of the doorframe. It protruded from the wall at least a couple of inches. It was almost like a little shelf. His fingers touched a small metal object.

A key.

Had it always been there, George wondered, or had it just appeared now, because he needed it to be there?

He examined the key for a moment. It looked utterly ordinary. It even had the Schlage brand name embossed across it. Nice touch, George thought. He knew it was no ordinary key, though. It had a sheen about it that went beyond simple newness. It had energy. Perhaps even life.

He inserted the key into the keyhole in the doorknob. It turned easily. He heard a click as the latch retracted. He gently pushed on the door, opening it ever so slightly.

A white glow shone through the crack.

George carefully removed the key from the knob and put it in his pocket. He was sure he was going to need it again. With another deep breath, he pushed the door open the rest of the way and stepped across the threshold.

I must be crazy, he thought.

He couldn't see a thing. He was surrounded by stark, pure, glowing whiteness. It felt like a room, somehow, like there were walls in there somewhere, but he couldn't see them. There was nothing to see.

He turned around to look behind him. He could still see the doorway, and the corridor beyond it. He relaxed a bit, knowing he could still go back.

Perhaps he should stop now, go back to his desk, make some notes about all this, and figure out how to proceed. He still had the key, and he knew how to see the door clearly now.

He took a step towards the doorway. As he did so, the door swung shut.

And disappeared.

The place where the doorway had been was now just part of the surrounding whiteness. There was no knob, no doorframe, not even a line indicating an edge. Nothing.

George swallowed hard.

So much for using the key again.

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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You definitely should! ;)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, then... I suppose I should get off my backside and finish those three novels I have about half-done.

All together now: "Slacker!"
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Writers_Block "Hrm, very 'Secret Window, Secret Garden' of you. Except without Stephen King's rush to instant gore and throw backs to previous occasions that have nonsensical plots in the story. I was never a fan of 'Four Past Midnight', but then again short stories bug the hell out of me.

Anyways now I'm going off on a tangent. Very well written, you put a lot of effort into your craft. I wish I cared as much as you when writing on this site, but to me all this is just a game to hone my skills.

When it comes to real writing, I always edit the draft at least ten times before letting anyone....tangent again.

Great story, I'll post a branch when I get a chance, and don't worry I will care a little.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "I've got to agree with Stanley - I mean Seldom - on this one: I thought your work was publishable as soon as I read it. And I don't mean merely publishable in second-rate martial-arts magazines!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, all I can is... after a long hiatus (translation: failing to get my ass in gear and just write, dammit!) it's good to know that the skill hasn't completely deserted me. I'm one of those people who is devilishly good at starting things but sorely lacking in the ability to sustain and finish. Oh, those mood swings!! I think this site is just the thing for me. Feedback and collaboration will keep me coming back. And writing! Dammit!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Yeah,

Agree writing is fantastic. It sort of reminds me a bit of Tom Holt - only better to be honest. Don't know why youre still here Fal because everything you've donme so far is publishable. If you've been sending it off then you've been really unlucky. And if not why not!!!
I know about this, I worked in the book industry for a couple of years.
:)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Glenakin ""Somebodysomeday83 (love the name, by the way) is right, and so is the pinch doctor or Doctor pinch. Read your earlier chapters and they are almost perfect, which means: very, very good.
However, I can't hold it against you - most times (at least in my case) it takes months before I release something I've written to the public. There's always something to correct in a story. Always.
Good work though. Loving everything so far."
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "I have to agree with Pinch on this one, it could definitely be cut-down-in-size. However, I'm guessing that this is because you felt-the-need to get your next installment written quickly? This said because you're first two chapters were practically-flawless. I'm sure given the opportunity and time, you would have edited it to your usual standards. Right? Still, like where you're taking it. Also how you incorportated the previous two branches :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Caesar "Guilty as charged.
Although it was my intention to accelerate it to make the character seem desperate enough to do what he did.

Still fairly new to writing, so bear with me and please, don't hesitate to criticize my stories/branches/chapters in detail. It helps me tremendously.

Thanks Pinch :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "I agree with your criticisms. Even before I read your comment, I re-read the chapter, and the "hard to describe" sentence jumped right out at me. I can be a lazy bugger sometimes.

Thanks for your candor.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Too much repetition in the first half of this - it could be half as long. And saying "It was hard to describe" sounds like a cop-out: you are a writer, describe it!

Otherwise, once it gets going, the tension lifts ncely again, and it's a very tantalising cliffhanger.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thank you, good doctor. It's been a postmodern kinda day. I read one of JJ1979's pieces earlier, and it had a couple of characters talking postmodernism and humanism in a bar. And then here you come with your comment! So, needless to say, I've been reading up on postmodernism. There are certainly a lot of writers I like that fall into that category.

I appreciated the feedback. Thanks again.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Postmodern and intriguing - haven't moved on to the other chapters yet, but already worth a five for some very efficient writing."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Caesar "Inspiring. Suspense and anticipation take hold after every chapter.

Please continue, Fal, and I'll try to get into your mindset to write another chapter too.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "fantastic - carry on! i wanna know!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Hey,

Love the intrusion of the weird into the everyday setting. Great characters being built up too.

:) Intriguing definitley
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, I'm certainly gratified that people are enjoying this. Many thanks for the comment!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "Love it. Very drole; 'Office Space' meets Margaret Atwood!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Wow. I'm glad you're enjoying it. That's one of the reasons I decided to try out this site. I thought that, if I could write some stuff and get actual feedback from people, it might prompt me to actually continue writing (momentum being something I have trouble sustaining most times).

There will be more!
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You can't do this to me. You must do a follow-up. The pace is wonderful as is the suspense. I'm wondering where this is going to go? Has George, bored with the monotony of office life, of Monday mornings, day-dreamed the whole thing up? Has he nodded off at his desk? Is it a practical joke? Or has he recently been through a tough time, and his colleages are simply humouring him? Perhaps he's had an accident and it's affected him in some way. I wonder this, because of how you re-iterated the sequence of disbelief: denial, confusion... and then acceptance. Was it really acceptance, or simply a case of humoring him?

I've book marked the page, and look forward to your next installment :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks for the feedback! I've managed to post another chapter, and I think one more will get me where I want to go."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "Great. I hope you post it before somebody else beats you to it! I'm liking your style. A piece which any nine-while-fiver, and indeed writer, can easily relate to. I particularly like your interaction between characters. Well-written :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks! Yes, I definitely have more. My first chapter was originally going to have more in it, but it was getting long, so I split it up. I thought I'd let it sit for a couple of days, just in case anyone decided to do something with it. I'm actually hoping to get the story to a certain point before others start to run with it."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "I like your style, will you be adding another chapter?"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks for the comment!! It's an idea I've had in my head for a while now, and after I found this site, I decided to do something with it. Also thought I'd poke fun at the whole "writers writing about writers" thing. It seems that at least half my stories have writers as the main character. I guess it's a case of ... "write what you know." Taken to the exteme, of course."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Rac7hel "I just got finished reading two other stories, both of which had writers as main characters. As soon as you said George was a writer I was like "Man, writers love writing about writers!" Anyway I like the story so far. :)"

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