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'Look, but don't look'

Utterly befuddled, George tried to preoccupy himself with work for the rest of the morning. With some success: the work was nothing if not mind-numbing. Opening up an excel document on his cubicle’s PC, he started the reformatting of some accounts he’d been forestalling for some weeks now. Painstakingly dull as they were, there were at least formulae determining where everything belonged on the spreadsheets. He soon lost himself in the numbers. But lunch-time rolled around soon enough and – no sooner had he logged-off his PC – George found he could once again think of nothing but that door.

Sidling towards the water-cooler – perfunctory smile as Jocelyn swept busily past – George stopped and squinted. He could see the door quite clearly; no question of that. But there was something slightly odd about it. Of course, it’s just being there was odd, but there was something else.

George took a step backwards and cocked his head to an angle. It wasn’t that the colour and texture of the door was incongruous with its surroundings. If anything, the doorway was particularly smoothly rounded into the wall; almost seamlessly so. But it just didn’t look right. It was something like the sensation George had experienced whenever he had tried to look into those 3-D pictures that everyone had been so excited about a few years ago. The ones you had to ‘look at, but not look at’. George had always found this advice particularly unhelpful; alternating between squinting and gazing blankly at the computer generated squares and experiencing nothing but a mildly disorientating awareness of there being something just beyond his field of perception.

And that was what he was experiencing now.

Until his concentration was unceremoniously broken.

‘GEORGIE-BOY!’

Bill had leapt in front of the door, and was staring rather strangely at George. It took a moment for George to realise that Bill was mimicking him.

‘What the frack are you looking at Georgie-boy? You look like you’re really getting into that wall!’

George blinked the squint out of his eyes; re-orientating on Bill.

‘Not the wall, Bill, the door. I’m looking at the door.’

Bill shared a sidelong glance with Fiona, who George now noticed standing on the far-side of the water-cooler. He looked back at George, eyebrows raised.

‘O-k-ay then! The door! He's getting into the door’  

‘You’ve just got to look… but not look…’ George tailed-off.

‘Right George look but not look… helpful advice! Maybe I'll try that tonight George… and maybe you could write a book about it?!’

 Bill and Fiona walked off laughing, leaving George by himself again, staring at the door. But something Bill had just said stayed with him

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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You definitely should! ;)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, then... I suppose I should get off my backside and finish those three novels I have about half-done.

All together now: "Slacker!"
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Writers_Block "Hrm, very 'Secret Window, Secret Garden' of you. Except without Stephen King's rush to instant gore and throw backs to previous occasions that have nonsensical plots in the story. I was never a fan of 'Four Past Midnight', but then again short stories bug the hell out of me.

Anyways now I'm going off on a tangent. Very well written, you put a lot of effort into your craft. I wish I cared as much as you when writing on this site, but to me all this is just a game to hone my skills.

When it comes to real writing, I always edit the draft at least ten times before letting anyone....tangent again.

Great story, I'll post a branch when I get a chance, and don't worry I will care a little.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "I've got to agree with Stanley - I mean Seldom - on this one: I thought your work was publishable as soon as I read it. And I don't mean merely publishable in second-rate martial-arts magazines!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, all I can is... after a long hiatus (translation: failing to get my ass in gear and just write, dammit!) it's good to know that the skill hasn't completely deserted me. I'm one of those people who is devilishly good at starting things but sorely lacking in the ability to sustain and finish. Oh, those mood swings!! I think this site is just the thing for me. Feedback and collaboration will keep me coming back. And writing! Dammit!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Yeah,

Agree writing is fantastic. It sort of reminds me a bit of Tom Holt - only better to be honest. Don't know why youre still here Fal because everything you've donme so far is publishable. If you've been sending it off then you've been really unlucky. And if not why not!!!
I know about this, I worked in the book industry for a couple of years.
:)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DESIGNFAULT "i love the 3d picture analogy.im not a writer of your obvious calibre but in my humble opinion its great.makes me want to read more and it also makes ME want to go through that door."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "I have to agree with Pinch on this one, it could definitely be cut-down-in-size. However, I'm guessing that this is because you felt-the-need to get your next installment written quickly? This said because you're first two chapters were practically-flawless. I'm sure given the opportunity and time, you would have edited it to your usual standards. Right? Still, like where you're taking it. Also how you incorportated the previous two branches :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Caesar "Guilty as charged.
Although it was my intention to accelerate it to make the character seem desperate enough to do what he did.

Still fairly new to writing, so bear with me and please, don't hesitate to criticize my stories/branches/chapters in detail. It helps me tremendously.

Thanks Pinch :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Gets things nicely back on track - dovetailing well with the original posts. Marred only by some slightly messy sentences at the beginning."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thank you, good doctor. It's been a postmodern kinda day. I read one of JJ1979's pieces earlier, and it had a couple of characters talking postmodernism and humanism in a bar. And then here you come with your comment! So, needless to say, I've been reading up on postmodernism. There are certainly a lot of writers I like that fall into that category.

I appreciated the feedback. Thanks again.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Postmodern and intriguing - haven't moved on to the other chapters yet, but already worth a five for some very efficient writing."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Caesar "Inspiring. Suspense and anticipation take hold after every chapter.

Please continue, Fal, and I'll try to get into your mindset to write another chapter too.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "fantastic - carry on! i wanna know!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Hey,

Love the intrusion of the weird into the everyday setting. Great characters being built up too.

:) Intriguing definitley
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego ""Look but not look." I like that. It adds a deeper sense of "otherness" to the door. And I definitely have some more "otherness" in mind."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, I'm certainly gratified that people are enjoying this. Many thanks for the comment!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "Love it. Very drole; 'Office Space' meets Margaret Atwood!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Wow. I'm glad you're enjoying it. That's one of the reasons I decided to try out this site. I thought that, if I could write some stuff and get actual feedback from people, it might prompt me to actually continue writing (momentum being something I have trouble sustaining most times).

There will be more!
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You can't do this to me. You must do a follow-up. The pace is wonderful as is the suspense. I'm wondering where this is going to go? Has George, bored with the monotony of office life, of Monday mornings, day-dreamed the whole thing up? Has he nodded off at his desk? Is it a practical joke? Or has he recently been through a tough time, and his colleages are simply humouring him? Perhaps he's had an accident and it's affected him in some way. I wonder this, because of how you re-iterated the sequence of disbelief: denial, confusion... and then acceptance. Was it really acceptance, or simply a case of humoring him?

I've book marked the page, and look forward to your next installment :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks for the feedback! I've managed to post another chapter, and I think one more will get me where I want to go."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "Great. I hope you post it before somebody else beats you to it! I'm liking your style. A piece which any nine-while-fiver, and indeed writer, can easily relate to. I particularly like your interaction between characters. Well-written :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks! Yes, I definitely have more. My first chapter was originally going to have more in it, but it was getting long, so I split it up. I thought I'd let it sit for a couple of days, just in case anyone decided to do something with it. I'm actually hoping to get the story to a certain point before others start to run with it."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "I like your style, will you be adding another chapter?"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks for the comment!! It's an idea I've had in my head for a while now, and after I found this site, I decided to do something with it. Also thought I'd poke fun at the whole "writers writing about writers" thing. It seems that at least half my stories have writers as the main character. I guess it's a case of ... "write what you know." Taken to the exteme, of course."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Rac7hel "I just got finished reading two other stories, both of which had writers as main characters. As soon as you said George was a writer I was like "Man, writers love writing about writers!" Anyway I like the story so far. :)"

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