Twilight Zone?
George was baffled by the circumstances. The door was there, yet none of his co-workers seemed to notice it, and even completely forgetting about it in Sharon's case.
Over the following weeks George inquired about the door to anyone who would know. The janitors, the elevator guy, the maintenance guy and none could shed light on this mystery. Not even the building manager could tell him what was behind it, and it was his job to know, but George had not pressed him, the man was becoming suspicious.
The whole thing was a complete absurdity. George had done some recon as well. By walking around the office, he gained a perspective of the physical setup and came to the conclusion that there in fact was a room behind the door, about the size of a kid's bedroom, utterly inaccessible from anywhere but the mysterious locked door.
Try as he might, day in and day out, George could not put it out of his mind. He became obsessed with finding out what was behind it. He kept telling himself that there would be no door without a reason, somebody was using it. He decided to try an experiment.
After work on the next day, George stayed. He took a very small piece of string and set it on the door's knob, securing it with a dab of spittle. As he stepped back, it became unobservable. He was satisfied, it would tell him if anyone was using the door during the night. It was the only explanation he could come up with.
The suspense was terrible and he hardly slept that night. Morning arrived none too soon and he hurried to the office.
"Here early, for a infamous change, hey George?" Bill was chatting with Fiona by the water cooler.
George ignored the comment in his excitement and headed straight for the knob. "Oh my, it's gone!"
Fiona stared at him as if he had just spoke sanskrit. "What exactly?"
"No...nothing, forget it." George walked briskly to his cubicle, furiously contemplating his next step.










All together now: "Slacker!""
Anyways now I'm going off on a tangent. Very well written, you put a lot of effort into your craft. I wish I cared as much as you when writing on this site, but to me all this is just a game to hone my skills.
When it comes to real writing, I always edit the draft at least ten times before letting anyone....tangent again.
Great story, I'll post a branch when I get a chance, and don't worry I will care a little."
Agree writing is fantastic. It sort of reminds me a bit of Tom Holt - only better to be honest. Don't know why youre still here Fal because everything you've donme so far is publishable. If you've been sending it off then you've been really unlucky. And if not why not!!!
I know about this, I worked in the book industry for a couple of years.
:)"
However, I can't hold it against you - most times (at least in my case) it takes months before I release something I've written to the public. There's always something to correct in a story. Always.
Good work though. Loving everything so far.""
Although it was my intention to accelerate it to make the character seem desperate enough to do what he did.
Still fairly new to writing, so bear with me and please, don't hesitate to criticize my stories/branches/chapters in detail. It helps me tremendously.
Thanks Pinch :)"
Thanks for your candor."
Otherwise, once it gets going, the tension lifts ncely again, and it's a very tantalising cliffhanger."
Also, there are some odd turns of phrase that stick out awkwardly. Not sure this effort has helped the story."
I appreciated the feedback. Thanks again."
Please continue, Fal, and I'll try to get into your mindset to write another chapter too."
Love the intrusion of the weird into the everyday setting. Great characters being built up too.
:) Intriguing definitley"
There will be more!"
I've book marked the page, and look forward to your next installment :)"