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The Enigma Deepens

George spent the rest of that day thinking about the enigmatic door. Of course, the first thing he'd done after his colleagues had sauntered off was to try and open it, and, of course, it was locked. He'd surmised as much when he'd noted the keyhole in the knob. He hadn't imagined anything so mysterious would be so easy to investigate.

And it certainly wasn't.

The next thing he'd done was to pay a visit to Jocelyn, the senior secretary, to ask if she knew anything about the door. Jocelyn knew everything that went on, at least on the tenth floor, and if there were anyone able to shed light on this mystery, it would be Jocelyn.

"Across from the water fountain," she'd said, in a skeptical tone with a skeptical expression on her face. "Is this some kind of practical joke? You know as well as I do that there's no door across from the water fountain."

"You have to see if for yourself," George had said. "It'll just take a minute."

"I don't have time for this, George," Jocelyn had replied. "I have work to do."

And that was that. No amount of badgering or cajoling would pry her from her seat. She'd finally threatened to report him to his supervisor if he didn't go away.

And so George had gone back to his desk. He'd tried to get some work done, but he'd been unable to completely push the thoughts of the door into the background. He'd finally resigned himself to catching up on some small tasks that had built up, and had taken the occasional trip to the washroom, just to check that the newly discovered door was actually still there.

It was.

And he was the only one who seemed aware of it.

It was now Tuesday, and George, after a restless night of interrupted sleep, was again at his desk, again staring blankly at his monitor, and again fighting off distraction caused by thoughts of the door.

Giving in to the utter futility of forcing focus, he sat back, took a deep breath, and allowed himself to daydream. All through the previous day and night, he'd been trying to figure out what to do next. Now, finally, he let the little nuggets of speculation jump out and run around on the plains of his psyche.

Finally, he got up, grabbed his coffee mug, and headed for the washroom. He had a little experiment he needed to run.

After rinsing his mug, he took up station by the water cooler and waited for someone to come by. After a couple of minutes, Dan from Accounting appeared on the landscape, mug in hand.

George put on his most earnest and thoughtful expression and stared intently at the mystery door.

"Hey, George," Dan said with a smirk. "Woolgathering?"

George looked at Dan. "No," he said in his most serious tone. "I'm trying to figure out why I never noticed that door before." He nodded to the area opposite the water cooler.

Dan looked in the direction indicated, then looked back at George with that same expression of wariness George had seen on Bill, Fiona, and Warren the day before. Before Dan could protest, George took him by the arm and led him across the corridor.

"You have to really look," George said.

After a moment's hesitation, Dan gave in and really looked. And, sure enough, that look of uncertainty appeared on his face. And then the realization. Just like clockwork.

"No, I never noticed it before, either," Dan said. "Weird."

And he walked away.

George tried the same experiment on five more people, just to be sure. It was the same sequence of events each time, just like it had been with Fiona, Bill, and Warren the day before, and with Dan today. Disbelief, followed by uncertainty, followed by acceptance. And then the nonchalant dismissal, as if it couldn't possibly be anything strange.

So why was George the only one who thought it was unusual?

He was about to call it quits and head back to his desk when he saw Sharon come around a corner and head in his direction.

"Hi, George," she said. "How're you doing?"

"Good," George replied. "Did you bruise up from yesterday?"

Sharon stopped short and stared at him. "Bruise?"

"Yeah. You rammed your lower back into the--"

"How would you know about my bruise?" Sharon was looking at him oddly. "I don't even know how I got it."

"But I was here when it happened. We crashed into each other, and you went flying across the hall and slammed into the--"

"Yes, I remember that, but that's not how I got the bruise."

"Of course it is. You slammed your back into the doorknob."

"What doorknob?"

"The doorknob right there." George pointed.

Sharon looked at the area across from the cooler. When she looked back at him, her expression was cold.

"If this is your idea of a joke," she said, "it's not even remotely funny."

She shifted her ever-present pile of folders and moved off down the hall. George gaped after her, his jaw hanging slack.

She had no memory of discovering the door.

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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You definitely should! ;)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, then... I suppose I should get off my backside and finish those three novels I have about half-done.

All together now: "Slacker!"
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Writers_Block "Hrm, very 'Secret Window, Secret Garden' of you. Except without Stephen King's rush to instant gore and throw backs to previous occasions that have nonsensical plots in the story. I was never a fan of 'Four Past Midnight', but then again short stories bug the hell out of me.

Anyways now I'm going off on a tangent. Very well written, you put a lot of effort into your craft. I wish I cared as much as you when writing on this site, but to me all this is just a game to hone my skills.

When it comes to real writing, I always edit the draft at least ten times before letting anyone....tangent again.

Great story, I'll post a branch when I get a chance, and don't worry I will care a little.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "I've got to agree with Stanley - I mean Seldom - on this one: I thought your work was publishable as soon as I read it. And I don't mean merely publishable in second-rate martial-arts magazines!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, all I can is... after a long hiatus (translation: failing to get my ass in gear and just write, dammit!) it's good to know that the skill hasn't completely deserted me. I'm one of those people who is devilishly good at starting things but sorely lacking in the ability to sustain and finish. Oh, those mood swings!! I think this site is just the thing for me. Feedback and collaboration will keep me coming back. And writing! Dammit!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Yeah,

Agree writing is fantastic. It sort of reminds me a bit of Tom Holt - only better to be honest. Don't know why youre still here Fal because everything you've donme so far is publishable. If you've been sending it off then you've been really unlucky. And if not why not!!!
I know about this, I worked in the book industry for a couple of years.
:)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "I have to agree with Pinch on this one, it could definitely be cut-down-in-size. However, I'm guessing that this is because you felt-the-need to get your next installment written quickly? This said because you're first two chapters were practically-flawless. I'm sure given the opportunity and time, you would have edited it to your usual standards. Right? Still, like where you're taking it. Also how you incorportated the previous two branches :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Caesar "Guilty as charged.
Although it was my intention to accelerate it to make the character seem desperate enough to do what he did.

Still fairly new to writing, so bear with me and please, don't hesitate to criticize my stories/branches/chapters in detail. It helps me tremendously.

Thanks Pinch :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Equally well written and I'm admiring the patience and restraint, but something needs to happen soon or intrigue will turn to apathy..."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thank you, good doctor. It's been a postmodern kinda day. I read one of JJ1979's pieces earlier, and it had a couple of characters talking postmodernism and humanism in a bar. And then here you come with your comment! So, needless to say, I've been reading up on postmodernism. There are certainly a lot of writers I like that fall into that category.

I appreciated the feedback. Thanks again.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Postmodern and intriguing - haven't moved on to the other chapters yet, but already worth a five for some very efficient writing."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Caesar "Inspiring. Suspense and anticipation take hold after every chapter.

Please continue, Fal, and I'll try to get into your mindset to write another chapter too.
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "fantastic - carry on! i wanna know!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Hey,

Love the intrusion of the weird into the everyday setting. Great characters being built up too.

:) Intriguing definitley
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Well, I'm certainly gratified that people are enjoying this. Many thanks for the comment!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "Love it. Very drole; 'Office Space' meets Margaret Atwood!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Wow. I'm glad you're enjoying it. That's one of the reasons I decided to try out this site. I thought that, if I could write some stuff and get actual feedback from people, it might prompt me to actually continue writing (momentum being something I have trouble sustaining most times).

There will be more!
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You can't do this to me. You must do a follow-up. The pace is wonderful as is the suspense. I'm wondering where this is going to go? Has George, bored with the monotony of office life, of Monday mornings, day-dreamed the whole thing up? Has he nodded off at his desk? Is it a practical joke? Or has he recently been through a tough time, and his colleages are simply humouring him? Perhaps he's had an accident and it's affected him in some way. I wonder this, because of how you re-iterated the sequence of disbelief: denial, confusion... and then acceptance. Was it really acceptance, or simply a case of humoring him?

I've book marked the page, and look forward to your next installment :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks for the feedback! I've managed to post another chapter, and I think one more will get me where I want to go."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "Great. I hope you post it before somebody else beats you to it! I'm liking your style. A piece which any nine-while-fiver, and indeed writer, can easily relate to. I particularly like your interaction between characters. Well-written :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks! Yes, I definitely have more. My first chapter was originally going to have more in it, but it was getting long, so I split it up. I thought I'd let it sit for a couple of days, just in case anyone decided to do something with it. I'm actually hoping to get the story to a certain point before others start to run with it."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "I like your style, will you be adding another chapter?"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Faltarego "Thanks for the comment!! It's an idea I've had in my head for a while now, and after I found this site, I decided to do something with it. Also thought I'd poke fun at the whole "writers writing about writers" thing. It seems that at least half my stories have writers as the main character. I guess it's a case of ... "write what you know." Taken to the exteme, of course."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Rac7hel "I just got finished reading two other stories, both of which had writers as main characters. As soon as you said George was a writer I was like "Man, writers love writing about writers!" Anyway I like the story so far. :)"

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