Viden asked her mum and of corse she said she could. And as Viden had planned she went straight to Aidan's house.

"You want me to help you find the cloaked one?" he asks a bit unsure. Viden nodded and Aidan went and asked his mum if he could go out. They looked and searched.

"It's hopeless" Aidan gasped sitting down on the bench. Viden sat next to him. "We can't give up" Viden said "We will find him"

They went to the forest and their he was. "Don't make this harder" the cloaked one whispered. It is then that Aidan and Viden notice the young girl in front of him. She had long brown hair and deep green eyes. She only looks about 7 years old.

"Go away" she screams. Viden looks at Aidan. "We have to help her" she hisses. Aidan shakes his head.

"How? Look at him" Aidan says indicating the cloaked one.

"But he's going to kill her" Viden hisses. She then moves out from where they were hiding. "Hey" she shouts. The cloaked one turns to face her. "Leave her alone" Viden demmands. The cloaked one laughs the runs at Viden.

She turns and runs with all her might. "Run, Viden, run" she hears Aidan scream. But it doesn't help the cloaked one is fast and Viden can't run forever.

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Author guidance for This story

An idea that came to me as I sat down to write another opening chapter of another story.

Feel free to join in and adapt.

NOTE: Although it may not be clear, this story is a fantasy, and so Ye Olde themes and various fantasy elements are of course welcome.

TIME PERIOD: My original plan was to have it set a while back, maybe 1500's or thereabouts, but it has developed and turned into a 1960's fantasy story, which I think is nice because it's such a rarity. So keep that in mind when you're writing, but don't worry about it if you don't know the time-period well, just omit any cultural references.

CHARACTERS: Just so that people don't get all confuzzled, I'm going to write a short bio for each significant character. If you intend to add a new one - which you are of course allowed to do - please inform me of any information that may be useful.

AIDAN: An eleven year old boy with the curse of seeing death before it occurs. There is no set time for his foresight.

VIDEN: A fifteen year old girl, possibly an oblivious immortal.

THE CLOAKED ONE: A mysterious and unknown figure, always referred to by the above name, and never by 'he' or 'she'. Or 'they'.

updated Sep 5 '09 by LairdTom