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Robber in a mask

...there was a sudden commotion at the doors and the alarm began to blare. I was the center of attention when the alarm began and so for some reason, everyone glared at me as if I had set it off!

I could feel them all judging me, as if I had set the alarm off with my stupid looking face--as if the surveillance cameras had spotted me at the checkout and didn't like the looks of me. What nobody was paying attention to though, was the masked man with the gun, hurriedly passing cloth bags to his partner.

I pointed with wide eyes but I must have been gaping, and so all eyes were pulled into my giant mouth. I gurgled, but for some reason no words could form.

The man at the checkout gave me an incredulous stare as if I had just turned into an alien. Then he slowly tore his eyes from my face and looked over his shoulder. The other cashiers were on the ground, hiding behind their counters, and the few customers who had seen the robbery were huddled in a group. The cashier turned back to me and gave me such a stare of reproach that I felt I would collapse where I stood into a heap of shameful dust. Then, as if it were all my fault, the cashier slowly got down on his knees like everyone else.

Then the worst part of the whole story occurred.

The robbers noticed my stupid looking face.

And they waved.

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13 COMMENTS ABOUT THIS STORY RSS

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Tasha_Noble "Nice one, Olius! I love this story and It'd be nice for it to come back to life again."
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Dysphemism "And the moral of the story is: ugly people raise the crime rate."
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seldom "Lol like the part esp where the nose came off. Thanks for adding Tasha :D"
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RedheadRose "Great start..I love the whole typicalness of the situation too! Looking forward to the next installment!!"
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somebodysomeday83 "Love it! Loving the mindset, the hopeless tunnel-vision. I think we've all been there in one way or another, whether in our youth, or when we're having a bad hair day or are walking around with a long face. You know, if you walk around feeling good people are more receptive to you, and if you walk around feeling lousy - people are equally as willing to indulge. I know of a man who walks around believing that everything bad is destined to happen to him: no parking spots, people scratching his car, never winning even a tenner on the lottery, always getting stuck in queues. I swear I sometimes think he attracts it! It's an interesting thought.

Of course, some people are just treated badly because they have stupid-looking faces. I was that kid at school! lol. Thank God things changed, because it's not a good mindset at all.

Appologies for straying - great story. Add some more!! :-)
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seldom "Thanks guys :D
Ah, interesting stuff happens to weirdos and stupid-looking people. I should know ;)
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andywho "Very good Seldom.
It makes us want to know what happens next, even though 'Our Hero' doesn't really have any film star qualities.
A metaphorical page turner.
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Monkette "Cool! I love writing with a good old dry sense of humour."
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surreal78 "Got me laughing out loud with that one. The caterpillars bit was priceless."

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