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by sybaritic in Action / Adventure, Fantasy added December 22, 2007

Mandogren's Cry

Your camel is misbehaving.

It is also extremely hot, and what was once upon a time a fine, flowing cotton tunic is now a scratchy and heavy, and unpleasantly pasted to your back with a mixture of sand and sweat.

You're close to regretting making this journey, but there really was no alternative. The elders have called you from halfway around the world, and your bond to them is as strong as it ever was. Distance and time mean nothing to them, only obedience and loyalty matter. Up until a few weeks ago, you would have called yourself a free spirit, roaming the free world, and only doing a little business when it suited you. But the sudden searing pain in the raised scar on your left calf told you it was time to return home.

You decide to halt your grumpy camel and give her a much needed rest and a little TLC at the nearest oasis, holding off the inevitable for a few hours more.

You whip the surly camel's rump with a certain degree of affection, and urge her on using the sweet words of her own language.2 more branches to read

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"It's a great start, with a good hook. I'm intrigued!"

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"Haha, this is a great opening line."

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Just Chatting
"Nicely brought about--I was a little uncertain about a talking camel, but you've imbued it with a level of intelligence, civility and a subtle sense of humor. I quite like this camel--so far--and want to read more."

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""The reassuring sloshing sound of her hump..."

Wow. do camel humps really do that? Neat!"

Just Chatting
"It's a great start, with a good hook. I'm intrigued!"

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"Haha, this is a great opening line."