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Whose soldiers?

The soldiers were tired. They were tired of tramping through forests that they did not know and did not trust, tired of taking orders from a fool of a Captain and a chit of a boy. They grumbled amongst themselves as they made camp that night and prepared to get rid of at least part of the tiredness.

Khoreia was tired as well. She was tired of being led round in circles, tired of playing the weak woman, tired of waiting for her brother to return. Donovan would not have been so stupid as to allow himself to be killed; and if he had, there were ways and means of dealing with that.

Right at that moment, she was thinking of ways to deal with the boy.

He was still useful. The King's son could never be not useful, if you wished to cause him pain. He had an older brother, true; but they would never be so stupid as to allow the Heir to go unsullied. There were agents in the palace at that moment, plotting, planning; and once their plans came through, the King would turn to his younger son and find...

Well. That depended on how cooperative the boy was. At the present moment, he was not being cooperative at all. Khoreia was no mean tracker, not like these useless soldiers; she knew full well when they were being led by the nose, around and around in circles, played with as a cat would a mouse. Where he was taking them she did not know; but she would find out, and there would be...trouble. She scanned the area, looking for him, and found him sitting on a treestump gazing at the moon. She could have laughed out loud at the expression on his face, but that would be counterproductive.

Instead, she went in search of a bath. After all, a girl had to smell nice...especially if she wanted to keep the young Captain on-side. His full cooperation would be assured after tonight, no doubt.

Drakon was thinking. He was thinking of Borysko, and Madame de Silva, and the beargirl. Contrary to Urska's belief, he wanted very much to make her herself again, if only he knew how to do it.

But most of all he was thinking of Khoreia.

She had already wrapped the Captain around her little finger, he knew, and he worried that he could not keep the troops on course much longer without suspicion creeping in. He thought he knew where he was going, but it had been so long since he had been there that the route was hazy, confused. If he could only find the beech that had been split into four by lightning, the Twiceblast Beech, then he would know he was on course. On course for something that may prove his undoing.

For there was a Vagari village hidden beyond the Twiceblast Beech. He had been there with his father, parading through their mean little habitations, showing them who their new Lord and Master was, the man they would in future bow their heads towards. They had seemed submissive, back then, when he was little more than a boy swollen with pride for his father's achievements, sitting astride his pony with his chin tilted at what he thought was a haughty angle. But now, he wondered. There had been...something in the air, after a while, something that said Yes, you came; yes, we see; leave now, before we conquer.

So he hoped, that if he led a platoon of exhausted King's Soldiers into their village, that they would...be dealt with.

Of course, there was nothing stopping him being dealt with either, especially with Khoreia in tow, a Vagari shapeshifter, practically royalty...

But he had to do something. And surely the son of the King would be some use to them?

An owl glided across the face of the moon, and he blinked. It had been a snowy owl, and for an inexplicable scond he was reminded of the man the soldiers had murdered. But he could not think why, and he put it out of his mind, and went to his blanket. He would sleep, and everything would be clearer in the morning...

Surely?

And then it was morning, and nothing was clearer. His sleep had been disturbed, and his limbs were heavy with tiredness, but he led the grumbling soldiery nonetheless, led them towards what could be both their doom and his.

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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Poor Steiffa. x3
And poor Healer; is definitely a young man's game, tricking soldiers. But they are so easy to con. =3

Eee, you reached P3 also. x3 Grats!
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smac972 "I've been following the comments on this particular tale. Right now, I'm floating on muscle relaxants for a strained back. I lifted an air conditioner over a fridge and have the athletic qualities of Dom deLuise (who I am dearly hoping will make a cinematic comeback) Currently, i have the full attention span of a manic third grader on ephedrine. Anyhow, I'm anxious to read this!"
Just Chatting
Burndtree "So two of those acrobat gals tagged along with Medved. I wondered where that third sister might’ve gone:)
Poor Steiffa – kept in a little cage...
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Tips & Advice
Burndtree "And Magpies are good luck, or bad, depending on the number seen. And that’s in the West. In China, magpies are good. Dragons – bad in the West – good in the East. And a trickster image for North American first-nations' .Of course, our Madame’s powerful to the extreme: maybe can assume any form she chooses?"
Editorial Note
Bolsheviki "I was just wondering what our Madame's animal would be. Something appropriate, it must be. Something...unassuming, yet powerful. =o
A magpie. Although that may just be a product of my slight obsession with them. They are meant to be cursed birds, so perhaps that is not so appropriate. xD
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "You're so kind, making excuses for me forgetting plot points. xD"
Tips & Advice
Burndtree ""Nice nice boots-eye view of things.
But...but...but...Steiffa also brought a vial of the silvering for Madame...;)for a shapechanger's getaway, perhaps, after the aspirin...er, green willow soothes away the pain from all that nasty Scarlet torturing."
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Ah, the world of smilies, which I already use far far too much. =D
See?

A not-so-noble wolf, aha. I shall have to be firm with him. I think a missing arm should do it, eventually. -evil cackle-
Aw, teddy bears. <3 I like her already. =D
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Bolsheviki "You have to be careful of wardrobes, you know. =3 You never know what might be lurking in the back of them. =o It could be /anything/...
Thank you for your advice on the keeping of miniature Masters. It's so hard to find books on the subject. -shakes head- Of course, I will be certain to provide him with many distractions in the form of hamster wheels and perhaps some mirrors and a cuttlefish? or is that for budgies? Still, it should keep his teeth in good condition, a necessary thing for a teeny Time Lord.

Hah. x3 Now I'm getting worried that they might not actually be regenerating him. After all, surely they would have advertised the bejeezus out of it...
If they play fast and loose with regeneration I shall have to hunt them down and eat them.
With chips.
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Oh, the Doctor would have to catch me before he could put me off his Tardis. I might stowaway in any of her possibly infinite rooms. She is much bigger on the inside, etc. Hide in a big old dresser, perhaps. Mmmaybe not – distinctly heard something at the back of that old dresser, like clashings of steel, and a cat far far bigger and noisier than our troublesome Khoreia.
Ah, but can anyone ever contain the universe conquering ambitions even of a mini-Master? Well, yes, perhaps if he burns off some excess energy running that hamster wheel. And keeping him on a healthful diet should help things, and other sentient folk. Just not tooooo much cake for the mini-Master, because the sugar-high will render the little tyrant truly unmanageable.
---
I’m…too much in shock to speak on this regeneration drama awaiting lucky You this coming Saturday night – which I’ll not see first-hand for all of one more year…if the 4th season isn’t entirely pre-empted by CBC Golf, of course! No more Davie Tennant?...
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "You're too kind. n_n You write well too! I always enjoy your branches. =3
Do you think the Doctor would mind you hijacking his TARDIS? x3
Still, he might not be in any shape to bicker, 'cause in Saturday's episode he began to regenerate. BUT THEY HAVEN'T TOLD US WHO INTO.
...Sorry, but it's making me twitchy. x3

I've become fond of the sergeant. xD -pets him- I shall keep him in a hamster cage with my miniature Master.
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "You’ve just finished your school year – not been lax – only stretching now, re’laxing, that’s all. Because it’s summer! – and a long time coming, too. You might do Anything…before those back to school sales beckon at August end.
And you don’t write rubbish.
If only I had your skills when I was young.
Y’know…there is a way. Hijack the next roadside blue box I find. Go back. Hand over this thick sheaf, this Mage Hunting, and teach young me a thing or two.
…uhhh, I prob’ly won’t listen to me…remembering I thought I knew it all.
Nicely done with that Sergeant, too. I’d also figured he might aid our band of adventurers: Bory’s old army buddy from the wars, maybe. But your sergeant’s logic is perfect.
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "You need not worry about the Sergeant's loyalty. xD
His name means 'divine bear', so he must be a goody. =3

I am becoming inexcusably lax in updating this story. xD I will try and be better about it, although I assume you'd prefer a slow, good branch to a quick, rubbish branch...
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "...I can imagine Khoreia getting very annoyed with that captain. But indeed a happy ending could be on the cards...for someone. xP I rather like that captain actually.

Clever GoogleAdSense.x3
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "You did it nicely, both directions.
I feel bad...
Yaa, the ambush WAS actually Calla rustling the bushes one side, Urska crashing thru them along the other, Bory snatching Drakon to safety whilst soldiers spin about. Even Khoreia wondering if it might be Vagari hunters.
I'm realizing you might have had it better.
No, no real ambush. Still, squads head out, ready to do battle. Bewitched Captain fires on his own, unrecognized in the trees. They, fired upon, in confusion logical during combat, return fire. We've seen enuf real world examples, eh?
Ewurghhh [as in feeling dread, and shuddering a bit]...lovesick captain's gotta eventually catch up with the light of his life, doesn't he? Khoreia, embittered by memory and hate, could be redeemed by love, couldn't she? And ironically by her badly handled spell that accidentally poses this opportunity before her, roses and chocs in his hand. But hate does nasty nasty things to a heart. And soldier-boy's been so...so dying to find his love again. Bad bad Khoreia!
...Ooo, kinda neat...GoogleAdsense is running Dr Who ads along this page (because of our posts).
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "-salutes- Duly edited; thanks for telling me. It's probably my fault for not reading it properly. x3

Well, she is a prisoner-how else can she get her amusement? xDDD
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "I know; I saw the original on the big BBC Children in Need show. =3 One of the bonuses of living in the country I do. There was another one just after Christopher Eccleston regenerated into Tennant...also Children in Need.
I only watch that big show if they have a Doctor Who special. xDDD
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Also, just discovered Canada was cheated of Time Crash and Voyage of the Damned from the '07 Dr Who season! I'm gonna hike in from the great Canadian wilderness, place an order at the first Hudson's Bay trading post for one '07 season DVD box-set...also some flour, sugar, raisins, blackpowder...
If you go to www.bbc.co.uk/doctorwho/episodes/2007 - call up the page for Time Crash - with Peter Davison AND Davie Tennant - which I didn't get t'see! - you'll see in the upper left corner the Tardis and a bandaged teddy bear alongside her. A BBC call for donations for children in need.
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Awww, you poor Canadians. Dx Doctor Who usurped by golf? The only thing that usurped it here was the Eurovision Song Contest-which is incredibly stupid and we /always/ lose.
I'm quite glad I happen to live in the country where the Doctor was first created. xD
You can get Doctor Who in HMV, I believe...
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Dr Who for your birthday - You're sooo lucky to be on the right side of the Atlantic! Here, in Canada, CBC likely will broadcast the current season of Dr Who - when they're good and ready - pre-empting it whenever...say, for Golf! You can prob'ly stock up on die-cast Dalek miniatures, on a whim!"
Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "-gasp- A bear terrorised Kilt Boy?
...That'd be Jamie. I gave many of the Doctor's companions nicknames. Rose, for example, is Pinky; The pair of them add up to Pinky and the Brain. =D
Jamie is Kilt Boy for obvious reasons; he wears a kilt. And very good he looks in it too.
I want to watch that episode now. Must ask for Doctor Who for my birthday.
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "1967, it would seem..."The Ice Warriors: Episode 5". A scene with an actual live bear terrorizing Patrick Troughton's pair of companions.
And one of those books: "Toy Soldiers". Aliens, disguised as walking-talking teddy bears, kidnap earth kiddies, use 'em as soldiers in a very distant and bleak war.
Don't you just love Google? Wish it were around when I was in school!
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Good grief, the concidences just pile up! Obviously bears are important here. We shall have to continue with the naming conventions or THE FATES SHALL BE ANGRY.
...-cough- Sorry.
Jon Pertwee was an awesome Doctor, I have to say. I didn't like him at first but I became fond of him later. x3
Although I must say I can't think of a Doctor Who episode involving bears. Tsk.
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Exams do come first. Then play. You never have to apologize.
But, a little play now. Momentarily idle-me recalling a particular shire reeve named Hugh Beringar, from a tv adaptation of Cadfael. Likeable fellow played by Sean Pertwee, son of Jon Pertwee, the third Doctor Who. Quick googling about reveals exactly what I’d hoped for: more Bear’ness! Sean, in 2004, in A Bear’s Christmas Tale (un-house-trained bear amok in suburbia). And, according to IMDB, Jon as a boy played with the son of one gamekeeper, one AA Milne…um…of Winnie the Pooh fame.
Haarhaarrr!
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Just Chatting
Dyverse "Thanx Burndtree, didnt copy and paste it it, so I guess its re-write time!!! lol."
Just Chatting
Burndtree "Seems a lifetime ago, many winters back now, I'd ride bike out a jetty north of Vancouver Airport. Seals and seabirds. Eagles. Snowgeese, fueling up in the estuary, heading south. And snowy owls. Always gladdens my heart to spy one flying against the moon [smiles, implying something]."
Just Chatting
Burndtree "Hi, Dyverse.
Shouldn't be too big a disaster. If u haven't got your addition pre-typed, ready, somewhere on your pc, well...then it is re-write time, is all. Second draft can be the charm tho: just think of your first one as practice. To be safe, 'coz I'm a worrier, I've prefered copy-pasting my posts from drafts saved on my pc.
And re the 2 Branches: it's only prompting you to type in 2 titles, really - and they're for 2 branch directions, after yours, where someone else may wanna take this wondrous story.
Um - after you've typed yours in, or copy-pasted it, if you're previewing your chapter, just remember to hit that PUBLISH button at page-bottom.
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Just Chatting
Dyverse "ermm, I published my branch, but its not here, have I lost it? It said write at least two branches, does that mean I gotta write to different versions?"
Just Chatting
Dyverse "I hope people like my branch, its the first time I've written on this site."
Just Chatting
Burndtree "No worries, Bolsheviki. Exams come first. We'll all be here when you've time for play.
And nice t'see WandrinMinstrel having a go at Borysko, if the warrior's life had gone...a different way.
And...was about t'comment re "Adventure" - Should really be commented about elsewhere - right right right.
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Mm-hmm, I like it. Plots are always fun. I think we'll do well with this. Like you say, don't want to over-outline; I reckon things'll definately be movin' along at a fair lick now.
Funny how these things happen...one choice launching us into all this. x3 Someone's branched off that really awful branch at the beginning now; something entirely different could happen if someone took that elsewhere.
I'll update as soon as possible, but don't hold your breath; I have exams to revise for and a new puppy to look after. This may...lead to me being a tad bit slow.
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Toward Revolution! We know Khoreia and Donovan, certainly others we’ve already hinted at, are all party to a plot against cruel and hated King Alastor, Ruler of All. They can’t hope to fight this powerful King openly, so it’s all…working in the background, plotting, spreading lies, sowing discontent thru all the King’s conquered lands: differing nations, all of them eying their conqueror king and feeling no love for him, are more likely to take up arms against him, sometime, say after the right small final provocation.
Magic, and Khoreia’s discovery of our Beargirl, and possession of the hated King’s young son, all figure in these machinations, Vagari, and whatever the greater plot yet to be discovered. And removing an obstacle named Borysko.
Of course, all this only suggestion, Bolsheviki.
Back at the start of this fun, when Borysko and bear chasing him crash in on Drakon, and Drakon reflexively pops up a spell at the bear, I might've only gone with symbiotically linking Bory and Bear, adventuring together ever after. You went with a shapeshifting spell, gave us the beargirl – and see where the adventure's taken us!
The characters are well enuf defined: we can guess how they’ll react to events we put before them. Suppose, really, so long as we don’t over-outline, we won’t end up plotting away all the spontaneity, the surprise divergences and fluky bits o'treasure we'd otherwise never trip over.
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Bears galore! We ought to rename this story. xD
Yup, that chapter was a fun one. =P Mwahahaha.
...Do you have any idea where this is really going? I don't. It'll be fun finding out!
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Just Chatting
Burndtree ""Um...the ringmaster, back at the circus, Medved, also is "Bear" in Russian. Figured it might be a bit much to name the big old bear Bear, so he's Marron, for 'chestnut brown'.
Urska is lovely and sooo befitting so passionate a self -- and did You have fun or did you have fun with this one, eh?!
Yeah, prob'ly just a tad confusing if we had two Nyssa's running about."
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Know what Urska means?
Little she-bear. xDDD
In fact, all the names Borysko comes up with have something to do with bears. Orsola and Ursula mean the same as Urska, while Berdine means 'Bold as a bear'.
On the subject of names, Borysko means 'warrior' and Drakon means 'dragon'.
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Oooh, it's a tricky one to decide on. I believe I'll take the story off in a different direction, then come back and deal with it later. Possibly by having him turning up and giving them all a heart attack. xP
...Now...where shall I go...
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Yeah...and Zombie can work, too. Necromancy. Dark arts. Occult, hidden magic. The ancient Vagari lore. Dono recognized the taboo stuff Nyssa gave Drakon."
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Burndtree "Zombie, sure. Or...Remember when u showed Khoreia's kinda disdain for Dono's perhaps overly cautious way of doing? Might such a one pull Illusion from his bag of tricks, maybe? Was just running the line thru my noggin - "Donovan, lying under the moon" - There's lying, as in to lie down, in pieces maybe, bleeding into the ground; but also as in what a cautious spy prefers, if need be to lie his way thru - a deceiver, a liar, a trickster. Oh, and the silence works - big silent owl. I've gotta go empty a truck. Play with the zombie idea, Bolsheviki - we'll go with whatever feels good."
Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "-kills self laughing-
No time to be falling to pieces...
I'm afraid I'm going to have to bring Donovan back-although I think it would be much cooler if he were a zombie of some description. =D How does that sound?
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Well, the Vagari should have more to seethe about, shouldn't
they?--Something new --Other than those boring ancient grievances. And what better than whining about this murdering son of the hated murdering conquering king? "Oh, the apple doesn't fall far..."
Just know, if Khoreia's anything like my aged little sister, she'll razz Donovan next time she sees him -- "No time t'be falling t'pieces. Pull yerself together, man!"
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "-gasp-
Donovan's been murdered!
...Or was he? -shiftyeyes-
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Thanks. =3 You're better at Beargirl than me.
-looks entirely innocent- I should think the magic should be running out pretty soon...
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Good day, Bolsheviki.
Just a thought: Back at the the Pig and Bee, when Beargirl as bear doctor'd Drakon, she only tasted a little of his magical
blood; wondering how long she'll be able to play with shapeshifting, hmmmm?
Btw, liked what a caring beargirl you painted her with poor Calla.
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Just Chatting
Burndtree "Glad you like it, Jillian. Thanks."
Just Chatting
Jillian "Hey, just wanted to say that I've been reading this one religiously and enjoying every minute of it!
Great work, guys!
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Just Chatting
Bolsheviki "Drakon's friends, good question. =o
If I intro them, they're likely to be based on my brother's Guild Wars characters, because Drakon is. xD
The character I based Khoreia off, Juniper, didn't have much of a fun life either. xD She is my most evil and twisted character and I adore her. xD
Oh, and you're so good at doing the beargirl. xD I can't do missus beargirl as good as you! But I may try. =o
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Burndtree "Khoreia is such dastardly and scheming fun! But how else could she have turned out, eh? – Who else could she have become? – Considering her life growing up under that Ruler of All. You've made this so much fun -- Thanks!
Now it's just dawned on me (at rainy day's end here in Vancouver) that we haven't even touched on the academic goings-on back at the school -- or might this just go too Harry-Potterish, do you think? Has Drakon friends? If not, why not? Say he has: Who, and what are they like? Or is the school only landscape: a prince's hiding place?
Hmm...what will the beargirl do about poor green-eyed Calla?
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Bolsheviki "'Naturally, no manly captain of beneficent King Alastor’s mighty army could resist such a plea, and from such a distressed and pretty one as Khoreia. Taking her along on their manhunt he will later report was his logical recourse.'
Encapsulating Khoreia's personality perfectly there. xD -claps-
I actually based her on one of my existing characters and she's stayed remarkably true. x3 She's even a shapeshifter, like the character!
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Burndtree "Hiya, Bolsheviki. Very nice -- how you had Khoreia calm things upstairs at the Pig and Bee, and then take us to the circus. But -- What's a little Vagari sleep spell to our bear, I wonder? -- because she's no average bear."
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Bolsheviki "Good point there, Burndtree. I like your thinking. =o I dooooooo."
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Burndtree "Jillian’s right, Bolsheviki -- "Ruler of All" fits fine. So much more compact than "Sovereign of The Eight Lands that Bend the Knee to Me, Duke of the Ninth I Married a Sister To, etc." "ALL" has that aristocratic arrogance to it -- perhaps a king who thinks of geography and not people -- could explain why a despot's kid needs a bodyguard."
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Bolsheviki "Hey, I ran out of inspiration, okay? xDDD I couldn't think of a country name off the top of my head.
I know. Lazy. -shott'd-
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Jillian ""King Alastor, Ruler of All"

Haha awesome.
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Burndtree "Hey'Ho, Bolsheviki. Thanks for all this fun around your great story! Just a thought. Some real world cultures see a powerful symbol of regeneration in the bear: sleeps thru winter (winter = death), wakes in the spring (reborn, restored, healed -- maybe other symbolism -- touched for immortality?) What
effect might the beargirl's kiss have on Borysko? She'd, of course, have to somehow get over the "You slaughtered all my relations" issue. Just a thought.
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surreal78 "Burndtree: the site won't work without JavaScript support enabled -- make sure you have it turned on in your browser. What are you using at home?"
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Burndtree "So Sad. Home dial-up works, for once.
No Login button let me in - except the one on a Profile page.
Wanna branch "I want the beargirl".
Neither Publish nor Preview buttons work.
Gotta be this old machine at home that's the problem:
posting's just fine from work.
"
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Burndtree "Thanks, Miss Bolsheviki. And I see Borysko's work, whatever that might be, has just become more complicated. Great!"
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Bolsheviki "Lovin' this, Burndtree. x3 I like the way you characterised Drakon. Nice one. =D"
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Jillian "Ha, I love the satirical element of the protagonist! Nice one, Bolsheviki."

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