sam gose out with sally
They got to the hotel. They went to the desk. They checked in their rooms, all arabesque.
Sam's Mam found her swimsuit and went to the pool. Sam's Pap found his wallet and went to the bar.
Sam was left all alone, though he'd promised to be good. He knew this was his moment, He knew that he should grab it with gusto, grab it with glee, let none take his passion for the fair blonde Sally.
Sam felt excited; Sam felt relieved. He called the desk clerk and ordered dinner for two. His passion grew stronger; his vision grew dim, he showered and shaved; he practiced kung fu. He called Sally up and invited her in; her family didn't know he was planning such sin.
He wore his very best suit, his very best tie, his very best shoes, though he wasn't sure why. He paced back and forth, waiting with fear, knowing that soon, Sally would appear.
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However, I encourage Jait to reply to his own branch. Or someone else. Allie, where are you in all this?
Re: aspidistra (I had to look up the word)
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: an Asian plant (Aspidistra elatior) of the lily family that has large pointed basal leaves and is often grown as a foliage plant
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Polishing? Lawl... nice."
ah well, I shall have to console myself with reading this fun story :)"
"Te amo." she whispered, "Usted es mi todo. Usted es mi querido. Te amo. Te amo."
Care to give us a translation?"
sorry ;)"
Great start to something big. You seem to have a knack for good ideas here, but you still have some work to do.
We all started there too, though, so don't get deflated about it. Things take time to accomplish properly and you or anyone, really needs to look over anything you write and say, is this correct. Am I seeing issues somewhere here?
You'll be able to see problems with structure if you read it allowed to yourself the way its written now. If you find yourself putting breaks in between a sentence, you should probably put a period there, and if you find yourself taking a breath before starting a new sentence its probably a new paragraph.
Granted this isn't a perfect practise, but its a good way to get started. The best way too is to take anyone's opinions and also see where they might put periods or commas, or a new paragraph. Generally when you see a pattern in what they're doing you'll pick up on it.
Doing great though so far, I like your ideas, just keep working at it and read everything over to yourself. You'll see what I mean!"
I have a better way to deal with mid-story deletions in-mind for down the road, but it's not quite ready to go live on the site yet. Apologies for the heavy-handedness for the time being."
If you're using Firefox, there should be a built-in spellcheck... if you're using Internet Explorer, you can just hit the spellcheck button on the text editor's toolbar.
Thanks for contributing!"