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The Battle

Wrenching itself from the portal, the creature's vulgar musculature set itself square-on to Samir. Tendons cracking, sinews stretching, veins bulging; with each heave of its gargantuan chest the beast became yet more corporeal – and yet far from natural. The foul stench of its crude anabolic metabolism hung heavy in the air; its pollutants and toxins animating tendrils of shadow from the darker recesses.

Malandanti.

The word was starting to acquire a mantra-like quality for Samir.

Malandanti.

Percussive.

Malandanti.

Insistent.

Malandanti.

Or had those qualities always been there; lying dormant; his consciousness only now awakening to the words rhythmic potential: the war-drum heralding the imminence of battle?

Malandanti.

Hungrily snorting air, the beast coiled itself backwards. With the assurance and synergy of the waking-dreamer, Samir’s left shoulder rolled forward, assembling a symmetry with his right leg’s half-crouch. Muscles relaxed, centre-of-gravity lowered, the grip on the balls of his feet secure … time stretched and contracted beneath Samir as the beast flung itself across the room at him. 

Weight shifting onto the left foot, Samir pivoted out of the Beast's trajectory and slammed his fist into its leathery flank in one fluid motion. Twisting his fist on impact to rip its skin, Samir pressed the advantage and moved-in on the beast as it turned – stunned – from the wall where Samir had been standing. He smiled as he pulled his right leg back to deliver a roundhouse-kick to its grossly muscled-neck.

Malandanti.

Samir had found his heritage.

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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Monkette "I have been checking out some of your stories and this one has grabbed my attention the most so far. Not had chance to read the other chapters yet but looking forward to it. Very cool writing!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "Loving this site btw... I'll probably be less prolific once I'm off the couch (Knee-operation) but it'll definitely remain my favourite site - Thanks!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "A kickboxing warrior-rat! Brian Jacques meets Bruce Lee! Love it!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "Guess he could morph into a giant rat-warrior just as easily as a wolf, then. :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for JJ1979 "I found this exerpt from the Wikipedia piece interesting
'...On Thursdays during the Ember days, periods of fasting for the Catholic Church, the Benandanti claimed their spirits would leave their bodies at night in the form of small animals (wolves, butterflies and rats in the Friuli).'
So the warrior need not take the form of the wolf...
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for DrPinch "Felt a little bad for rating this chapter down a little, as it is very creative and the plot development is striking... it just seemed a little more contrived and in too much of a rush compared to the two either side of it.

Can't wait to see who tackles "The Battle" though - been a few days, is everyone too scared of it...?
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for somebodysomeday83 "You have a vast knowledge of vocabulary Nick, I'm impressed. A word which has been thrown around lately springs to mind: 'intense'. Intriguing!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "Okay, I probably won't be adding to this until I get back next week, if someone else wants to contribute, be my guest. I know the battle scene might be a bit daunting.

jait, wanna take a shot at it? :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for SplashofFire "The flow is fantastic! I will be eagerly awaiting the following chapters. My one question is...what brought on this wrought example of humanity?"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for seldom "Definitely impressed by the style of all three chapters so far - like the darkness and bleakness, juxtaposed with those vivid childhood memories - the red September sunset. Really visual and well-described.

Not fond of this sub-genre but you're doing a good job changing my mind ;-)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "If jait doesn't write it, I'll put something up soon. :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Taylos "I like this story alot. I want to jump in but I'm not sure I want my first post to be the battle."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for REDFOX "i love this so far, its really good. i love the whole werewolf genre, it was an unexpected development though, but i like the whole progression, he needed something/someone to happen to him to help him out. i like the whole, hidden secret within that he doesn't know about.

Great writing, good detail and description. =]

- RF
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Amo1143 "I love this! Some of my family comes from Modena, Italy, so I found it particularly fascinating. Great writing guys!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "Works for me.

I'm sure I'll add something soon... This story is right down my alley!
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "I'm working under the assumption that he's absorbing this information from dreams and isn't really aware of what he's dealing with.

As an aside, the werewolf transformation is supposed to have been the first time it's happening to him, rather late in life (I put him at 40ish.) It's one of those needs-based things where thus far in life he hasn't been required to do anything, but his calling came late... so he's kinda screwed in that sense. :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "Oh, certainly... the terminology we're using is from the Italian... but where Samir got it? From a hastily-scrawled dream-writing... Possibly the woman in his dream, chased by the shadows...

I like the idea of a modern-day supernatural conspiracy of shadow-fighters...
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "Yeah, I noticed that while reading about it. The notion is pretty widespread, but I believe the specific terminology we're using here is specific to the Italian sects, is it not? Not a big deal either way."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "They needn't necessarily be Italian. It's only the Italian sect--the Benandanti--who were documented (by virtue? of the Holy Roman Inquisition)... Most cultures have some sort of lore about Dreams, Dream-sharing and Dream-walking... Though, the idea of the spirits from the dream-world crossing over to the physical world... that's new."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "I tried to stick with the lore. Admittedly I'm not an expert, but from what I was reading on a couple of sites about the two opposing factions, I think this works as a modern-day followup. Even if Samir may no longer be obviously of Italian descent... the bloodline is in him. :)

(Also plays into the whole werewolf familial/bloodlines concept.)

Actually.. that just gave me an idea. But I'll save it for later in the story. :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for intoalkaseltzer "This is quickly becoming my favourite story on this site. I love it. I love that it has become a modern day take on such ancient and interesting lore."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "Okay, will write something in this one tonight. After I get the couple of bugs worked out that seem to have cropped up in posting since that 140-character debacle. :)"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "BWAH-HAHAHA! I totally missed that."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "Just reading on Wikipedia about the Benandanti / Malandanti -- excellent foundation. Wasn't my original idea at all, obviously (although I had forgotten a good 2/3 of my dream by the end of the day), but I really like it, and I think can work my story concepts into that framework, maybe a modern-day interpretation / continuation of the lore...

I'll do a little research (looks interesting... I love this kind of lore) and write something tomorrow after my Protagonize presentation (see blog.)

Hell, maybe I'll write something tonight and post it during my demo. Better than posting crap and deleting it after. :)
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "Oh, and I named the protagonist "Samir" because it apparently means "Companion in evening talk" in Arabic..."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "Obviously, the story reminds me a fair bit of the Benandanti / Malandanti stories... the basis for one of my creative projects... So, I've written a chapter to that effect. Hope you don't mind... I don't think it fundamentally changes anything in the story root.

Benandanti reference from Wikipedia:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Benandanti
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protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Nosferatu_Man23 "This is interesting. It leaves much to the imagination, which I'm particularly fond of. You definitely gave it a dream-like quality while anchoring it somewhat in the real world. Bravo!"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for jait "Fantastic. You start out creating tension right off the bat, and a desire to read more... I've always had a bent towards the supernatural... and that certainly seemed out of the ordinary. I'll probably jump in on this one eventually..."
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for Writers_Block "Wholey Nick, what were you poppin before you went to sleep! I think thats a good idea though I should start writing about what I dream about, I have some pretty &*$%ed up dreams! Excellent story...sorry I had to re-write this comment, I noticed it let my swear through haha...didn't think you'd appreciate that"
protagonize: author profile thumbnail for surreal78 "Inspired by a nightmare I had last night. >:|"

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