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The Copmature

    His partner was evidently still taking statements from the girl's party but Greg Fenton decided he was due five minutes. He stepped outside, feeling already the coolness in the air; the bite that hadn't been present last week.

    He'd had to let the Magician leave. He was a strange fellow, sure, but Greg couldn't believe he'd had anything to do with the girl's disappearance. He was too obviously in shock, and really, the guy hadn't been out of sight of at least two hundred witnesses at any time.

    He lit a cigarette and looked out over the quiet campus.

    Looks like a painting; those trees and that big old building there. This whole thing is a waste of time. Some student joke. She'll have had one other person in on it, maybe two. A scholarship student they might ask to leave - but not this one. Her dad will be good for a new gym; new science block, something. Waste of time - waste of money. These kids'll never learn when they have it so easy.

    He hadn't had it easy. A part of him wished he could have gone to a place like this. Only then he wouldn't have learnt what he had learnt and he valued that too. And also, he knew that if he had come here when he was young he wouldn't have appreciated it as he might now. He couldn't see his younger self studying hard, sweating over books and attending seminars. It was only later on he'd realized what he might've been missing.

    He had a library card now, subscriptions too to various periodicals. He was as well-read as any of them. And the strangest thing was how it all became applicable, this new knowledge. Quotes came sometimes to him, and he'd come out with them without thinking. It generated some weird glances, but did he care?

    The dark, Gothic buildings around the campus green made him think of a poem he'd once read. He'd have to look it up at home. Something about reflected truth and echoes? He was essentially pragmatic, but he shivered suddenly, feeling as if the buildings watched him: As if the weight of the years and the seeking of knowledge had brought them to resentful life. Echoes of the minds of all those who had come and gone.

    He ground out his cigarette, and only then noticed the kid.

    "What!" he said, probably too harshly because the kid jumped. He was thin and gangling with bad skin and hair that needed a wash. He had a look of someone who spent too much time indoors. Studies or XBox, it didn't matter.

     "Erm...It's about Brittany. Brittany Sanderson?" the kid said nervously.

    "Ok," Greg said. "First thing, what's your name?"

    "Joe. Joseph Tayna. Only I saw this truck."

    "Truck?"

    "Yeah. Blue? Dark anyway. Didn't notice the make. Only they drove off fast. I was coming down by Hopkins and it nearly hit me. I had to run, you know? And I thought it was weird. Anyway, my friend Mal thinks he saw this similar truck parked up by the theatre. And he told me Brittany was missing. I thought you should know, that's all. Probably it's nothing, but I thought I should say. Because you know, you hear stories where people saw something? Only they don't say anything - thinking it's not important, but it turns out it is important. But it's probably nothing." Joe said all this in one breath, then stared at Greg with hopeful and anxious expectation.

    "Probably nothing," Greg repeated. "Ok. Well thanks Joe. I don't suppose you got the plate number?" Joe shook his head. "We'll check it out," Greg said to reassure him, like a pat on the head. Well done, good boy.

    "Ok," Joe said. He backed away a step and then turned and walked quickly down the path. Greg made a note about the conversation. Time to find Nadine, see if she'd leant anything from those girls.

 

 

 

 

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Just Chatting
seldom "Hey Dys,

Sorry so much of my time is being taken up by house-hunting. Hopefully things will settle down soon, but my mental energy is drained. Add more if you like :). I'll join in as and when I can until my life gets less complex.
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Dysphemism "Clearly, I have a strange habit of using both homophobia and male homo-eroticism to generate a sense of horror. I reckon I owe it to Frank Herbert's antagonist in Dune, the Baron Vladimir Harkonnen.

And since only ten percent of the world's population swings that way, surely I owe Protagonize nine times as many heterosexual sex scenes. Hah hah... for a total of thirty-six? And I've only posted... umm... a half dozen or so, thus far? Okay, I'm kidding now . . . I hope.

Anyways, Seldom, are you going to take the story forward soon, or do you want me to double-post until you have time and inspiration?
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Just Chatting
seldom "Hey, sorry. As it's getting longer it's taking longer and longer for me to post. I think it's the keeping track - 28 chapters now! Has to be one of the longest things on here.
Will post soon as inspiration strikes and I can be sure of not making some complete dumb mistake. May go back and read again from the top.
Anyway, don't wait for me if you want to add anything in the meantime.
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Dysphemism "As much as I want someone to grow demonic wings and horns, and start fighting back in the middle of a rape scene.... I think some other things have to happen first. So I'm gonna branch 'Nadine LaFleur and the Disappearing Evidence' instead of Malcolm Larsson's branch."
Just Chatting
Dysphemism "It's somewhere between 'rape' and 'grope', and rather fruity."
Just Chatting
seldom "hehe sorry about the tentacles. grape?
Sorry I spelled her name wrong first time - I'd written this same chapter twice by then. It was better the first time. I forgot to mention a part I put in the first version (the one that got lost), about Brittany not being dead - just unconscious. I had Joe telling Melanie she wasn't a killer because she hadn't killed Brittany.
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Dysphemism "It happened to me when I was first writing the scene with the border guards."
Just Chatting
seldom "Okay second time lucky.:)"
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seldom "I went to hear an author talk about her books. I gasp left the house gasp faint"
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Dysphemism "Oh, social lives. I remember those. Kinda awkward, right?"
Just Chatting
seldom "Hey sorry I actually left the house! shock! horror! seldom has a social life? surely not ;) hehe"
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seldom "I don't know, I tend to overdo the description sometimes. It makes things I write slower - I have been toning it down for this because so much is going on. You realize that with descriptions and more in-depth character background/thoughts added this would be twice the length if not more. We are now at 25 branches!
hehe
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seldom "Three Little Pigs - don't you have that story in Canada? 'Littler pig little pig, let me come in...' lol lol
Wow on this branch - we are seriously quite sick aint we? hehe
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seldom "I was going to post now, but It's going to take longer. I'm going to read through again from the start so it'll take a while.
Sorry, will post as soon as I can, but am still undecided about the direction I'm going to take.
:)
great round-up btw
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Dysphemism "Fine with me."
Just Chatting
seldom "Well, am utterly shattered from crazy hours I've been keeping lately so it will have to be tomorrow - then I'll add a branch whether you have or not, how's that?"
Just Chatting
seldom "A typo? Me? no way!"
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seldom "We're cool XD"
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seldom "Oops you already changed it!"
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seldom "Yeah, that would be fine - the succubus can enter people in other ways. Don't think it matters about the Maddy, Julia thing. I was thinking if the succubus - freed from hell - wants to learn about humans to really mess things up/loses power somehow during the first exorcism attempt (could be Veronica that tries this) and has to rest up - could find Joe and lie low in him - only manipulating things in small ways - which would explain why it drops out of sight for so long. We could always change it as Maddy's only mentioned once. Maybe when we're done we should both take it away and edit it - then get together again to come up with a final version . Voila - our novelette!
We should have a big finale with lots of death and destruction - have it stretch over a few branches.
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Just Chatting
Dysphemism "And I need to clarify that the woman 'Maddy' that Greg thinks about in Branch 13 is (probably) not the same person as Reverend Julia Fenton."
Just Chatting
Dysphemism "And I seem to have neglected the fact that our leading lady is heavily make-upped and drunk."
Just Chatting
Dysphemism "The main point of interest being that his father has a dark complexion and black hair."
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Dysphemism "Go ahead. I'm still re-reading. Need to drawn on the previous chapters to keep some consistence. The descriptions of Andrew and the *blue* truck are sketchy. And I was afraid I had given Joe blond hair, which is too similar to Mal. But I guess I was only describing his chest. And even brown-haired men can have tiny blond chest hairs. And... yeah, a bunch of trivial details are in my mind now for the sake of consistency. You go ahead."
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seldom "guess so ;) If you haven't posted by tomorrow mind if I go ahead?"
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Dysphemism "Okay, I figured out why we both thought of branch titles for an agent Nadine earlier, seldom. It's because you mentioned her in Branch 2, The Cop. So, no spooky coincidence there. I guess it just stuck in both our heads?"
Just Chatting
Dysphemism "Okay, I just need to re-read a few chapters first so that I don't make any mistakes."
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seldom "Go ahead if you get there before me that's cool."
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donmari "cool ;P"
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Dysphemism "Okay, there's an international double-suicide kidnapping case to be dealt with, and ... Nadine is in the middle of a tough confrontation. This is quite the cliffhanger, and we're adding FILLER of all things. Hee hee..."
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donmari "hey yea thats real cool. Gripping but scary with it. Think you have yourself a great little novel here."
Just Chatting
donmari "hey thats quite scary. oooerrrrr. good stuff."
Just Chatting
Dysphemism "Yay! Let's pull out the drug addicted female pedophiles and the prudish liberal exorcist with his eccentric vocabulary!"
Just Chatting
seldom "Aw sorry Dys, I have been working some odd hours and have had a guest staying - just have not had time! Also I was trying to finish this short story for a competition.
Am hoping to post a branch by the end of the day ;D
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Dysphemism "I was pretty sure you were foreshadowing it in Mal's dorm room."
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seldom "Haha so that's where she went! How did you know I wanted her to blow her own brains out. Spooky
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