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...interloper.

Now was my chance. An entire lifetime hinging on this moment. Since childhood, he'd been my tormentor, my abuser, my most detested foe. He'd taken girlfriends, cheated on assignments, stolen jobs, set me up to take the heat for things he'd done. I'd forgiven him, publicly. But the hatred seethed in me, and this last transgression topped them all. He wasn't coming back from this one, whatever it took on my part.

My wife sat there coolly, still as a mouse under the roving gaze of an owl on the hunt. My eyes grazed over her voluptuous curves for a moment as I considered what I had to say. She looked beautiful, as ever. And untouchable.

Then he reached over and casually put his hand on her bare thigh, in plain, obvious view. Thumb and forefinger dug dimples into her porcelain flesh, almost cruelly, possessively. She winced. A crooked grin stole over his craggy, ruggedly handsome features.

And something inside me snapped.

Breaking point

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nickb Little mental break from building features. Figured I'd use what I've been listening to to fire up the ol' creative juices.

Inspired by the lyrics to Disturbed's "Run" (specifically the first line of the chorus, which is the first line of this story), the bonus track on Indestructible, their new album. That's been the soundtrack to my development for the last few days. I've been air-drumming to it while driving back and forth to the office all week. :)

As for guidance, pretty loose: stick with the first person as long as our main character is speaking (if you introduce other points of view, it doesn't need to be first person), and try and keep drawing out the revenge theme as long as you can.

I'll probably contribute something to this soonish...

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