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Closure

Feelings, squirming, seething, 

I feel sick and yet my heart is bleeding.

The whole world heaves

And I feel the ground beneath me greiving.

My hand, taking on the demanour of a demon,

Shakes and muscles clench,

Screaming out, for retribution?

Or is it simply closure, answers, in this world so filed with confusion?

I see him, I see her,

I can't quite see sense.

My trigger finger wants to make that final motion,

But my hearts not in the business of demolition.

I fall into a final pile at his feet, weep for myself, and the world,

Which has never seemed so incomplete.

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firethief "So it's come to this
a girl in a garden
a hardening heart
and a Winter's kiss
Salt in her bones
and the faltering
song of a mother's voice
resounding on stone
It's a thin tune
thin as new ice
and twice as cold
She curses the moon

ach gotta go ...
"
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ganga "Nice, Redacted! Same kind of "closure" I was thinking of as well!"
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Writers_Block "Even if its based on a song from lord of the dance haha?"
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Rac7hel "I like it! By singsong I meant exactly whatever you imagine singsong to be. (even if it makes you frilly)"
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Writers_Block "Haha I hope this is good? I assumed that when you said singsong you actually meant singsong...and if anyone is curious I based it off the tune from Dance Dance, in Lord of the Dance haha. If that makes me sound frilly well, I guess I'm a frilly frilly man."
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ganga "Feeling a bit creative today, and loving this singsong, Rac7hel! So here is another crack at it! Maybe it is degenerating into a limerick after all :)"
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ganga "My first attempt at a singsong. Whew!"
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surreal78 "Wow. That was harder than it looked. :)"
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Rac7hel "Go for it!"
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surreal78 "Neat idea! I may have to give it a shot later, but I may degenerate into a limerick.. :p"
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Rac7hel "I've been wanting to try this out, so I hope some of you people will join me.

I ask only that you write in "singsong"... It doesn't have to rhyme, although rhyming is good.

And you certainly don't have to stick with the same poem structure that I did. Do crazy things. Be creative.
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