An experiment: take the previous entry, modify one thing, and post. Repeat.
Pick one thing, change it, and post as a follow-up. Let's see what evolves.
"Want to get out of here?" he offered, squeezing her hand a little tighter.
Her heart fluttered. Of course she did, but so soon? Now? The party was just getting started.
"Come on, dance with me," she said instead, pulling him towards the middle of the room.