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Angel Killer

My name is Fravashi.  I'm an angel killer.  Now, a lot of people think that means I'm evil or I work for the devil or something like that, but it's not true.  I'm actually here to protect the world; to preserve things; to keep the natural order, so-to-speak.  See, angels have one job.  That's to guide you up after you die.  It used to be that there were evil angels, and good angels, the so called Angra and Spenta.  There was a constant battle between the two sides wreaking all kinds of havoc on the world, but that war has been over for years.  Ever since Satan got cast down.  So these days, angels are strictly 'hands off' when it comes to the world and people living in it.  Free Will is law, and my job is to make sure it stays that way. 

Every once in a while, an angel will be tempted to ease someones pain, or protect someone from harm, but that's all strictly forbidden.  If you help out one person, it would only be fair to help everyone.  And if you help everyone, and remove all possibility of hurt and pain, Free Will loses all meaning.  Love means nothing without the possibility of loosing it.  Friendship and compassion are worthless if they aren't willfully given.  So if I have to blast hot arrows through some poor angel's skull for saving an old lady from a speeding truck, I may not like it, but it's my job.  It has to be done.  Unfortunately, they go straight to hell.  There's no room for mercy in this business.  A lot of angels don't see things that way.  They think they can step in here and there on little things, and as long as I don't catch them, there's no harm.  But I would warn them.  I take my work very seriously. 

Hcoma was an angel of incredible beauty and light.  If people of the world could see her, even just for an instant, they would literally break into tears of joy.  In the days of the Angra and Spenta, she was an angel of falling waters, and many people loved her dearly and prayed to her for intervention.  Her wisdom and compassion were so famous that many people continue to pray to her even today, despite the institution of Free Will.  The first time I laid eyes on her, I was afraid.  I was afraid that if ever called to, I wouldn't be able to do my job.  I prayed to God that it would never happen.  As usual, he was silent.

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Darthmas "Sometimes the devil is discribed as a woman. lol"
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Darthmas "This story seems to have died many days ago..."
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Darthmas "not one of my best creations but it'll do. (Ask me to edit if i got some facts wrong.)"
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Darthmas "how do you spell his name."
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Darthmas "One of my specialities!"
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redhat "Thanks man, I got a lot of inspiration from the other co-authors. See what you can do with it. I'm kind of stuck on how to get Favrashi out of trouble."
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Darthmas "Beutiful! best story I've read so far on this site."
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redhat "oops."
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redhat "Lucifer is &!#!EDi"
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Clairexoxo "Thats good! i would not have thought of that, although you beat me to it!lol"
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Clairexoxo "Thankyou! I have been doing my research!you should have seen my first draft it was twice as long:-too long, lol"
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redhat "Wow. hell sounds rough. I like the first part about the gate. Good details!"
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eiji "This story is awesome"
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redhat "Thanks Claire, it's good to see new people jumping right in!"
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Clairexoxo "I really like this story its my sort of thing, angels, demons sort of thing! i hope i gave it justice!im new at this but im always dreaming about different things to write a story about but no where really to it and this story just jumped at me the writing is really good too(a bit intimidating)
I know what i added was a bit naf compared with the detailed chapters by redhat etc but i really liked how redhat followed up on what i had written! hopefully practise will make perfect!
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redhat "Thanks! Yea, I think the fun part about it is trying to weave a story into existing theological traditions."
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Monkette "I really like this story. I think that theological mythology gets overlooked compared to other inspirations for the fantasy genre. Very cool story! :)"
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redhat "Cool."
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Writers_Block "Hrmmmmmmmm.....I believe I might take you up on that offer, but in light of my new way of doing things I'm going to need to mull it over a bit first. Also I'm about to post my second chapter to Otherside...so I'll get back to it...I need to make sure I stay true to the story in this one before I just go jumping in."
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redhat "ok. I kind of had in mind that he was human, then a cherub then a seraph, and then promoted up to angel killer. Maybe that can be worked in when he goes after Uriel. You want to take a stab at it?"
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Writers_Block "Well, who was he, why is he meant to do this dubious job? Was he once human? Is he an angel himself?
The mystery is good but you want to provide a little bit of story to this character with the strange line of work.
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Rac7hel "seraph"
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redhat "Still needs to be developed WB. I wanted to build a little background with my chapters. Any ideas?"
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redhat "Ok. What's the singular of seraphim?"
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Writers_Block "Haha yeah, sorry Nick, I meant where is it in relation to the storyline :P."
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surreal78 "The second chapter by Jillian still seems to be there for me.. are you talking about another part?"
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Writers_Block "Um, what happened to Uriel? It's like that whole part of the story, that Jillian wrote, just disappeared."
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surreal78 "This totally reminds me of an old TV series from the late '90s called Brimstone. Premise is slightly different (he was sending escaped demons back to hell), but I loved that show... wish they hadn't cancelled it so quickly."
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Jillian "Oooo I want to add a chapter to this so baaad! I have to wait until I come up with something really good!"

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