So, this is an exercise for my course where I have to evoke emotion in a given place and use of character.
I'd really like to know if it works! Does it evoke any emotions?
Please tell me =)
P.S. It's a work-in-progress right now so I'll update it if it changes. Also, the title is most likely a temporary one too.
A sleeping forest, the country’s oldest friend
lies on sagging landscape; craggy, not dangerous.
Snowflakes cover fluffy ferns, skinny aspens, crooked junipers
in an echoless drape, frost ghosts a leaf. A mass of snow-tangled
branches paralyse footpaths; it’s like looking into a bean bag.
Somewhere in the distance
a bird calls to another; a Christmas choir heard through frosted windows.
The otherwise vibrant woodland soundtrack
now hushed with the delicacy of a library.
A child wonders through, clutching branches as she passes,
shaking snow dust from its resting place. Her bluish bobble
hat and knitted scarf hold the cold. Mittens on cuff strings jangle
like dumb bells, soaking wet rubber boots kick and crush their way onwards
off the well-tracked paths, amongst unspoiled, diamond painted
forest floors, sparkling in a million tiny camera flashes. She pants
and chugs with reddened cheeks and nose, misty breaths
plume and disappear in a wisp, in winter’s airy crisp.
Stumbling still she finds it;
tightly sealed under glazened lid, shocked reeds poke through
rigid shell, shards of ice sprinkled as if too much salt,
grey with leprosy the lake lies flat on its back; gaping in the snow
like a dead wound. She perches on a bench, shivering. She remembers the day
she finally knew him, happy. She’d watched him leap from
the tire swing and splash, thought he was pretending so she
smiled as he thrashed, kicked, gasped, the bubbling surface water
made her giggle