This is a poem, that i made up in class. I need some critiquing so I can make it better.

A little girl,

Walking in the street,

She suddenly looks up,

And theres a car at her feet.


Theres a man inside,

And he opens the door,

He tells her to hop in,

And she asks what for?


He says I'll take you to where you need to go,

But what comes next she does not know,

All she knows is that he's a man,

But what is unknown is his plan.


So she gets in his car,

and they go quite far,

and that is the end of her life,

which is soon ended by a knife.

The End

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