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It's high time for a thread where you can advertise the poems that you've posted and are looking for feedback on.
Please only include a link to one poem per post, and try not to post more than one poem a week. That way this will be more manageable. Also, if you post a link, please take the time to give someone else feedback on their poem.
Just to make things nice and clean, please copy this little form into your post and fill it out.
Title:
URL:
Type of Feedback:
Level of Feedback: hard/medium/soft
Rating: yes/no
Style:
Description:
example:
Title: Smoker's Dawn
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/poetry-workshop-summer-2009/34128
Type of Feedback: general impressions, detailed critique, comments on change from draft 1 to draft 2
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: yes please
Style: free verse
Description: a woman smoking and contemplating her life as the sun rises
Note: the level of feedback allows you to request more gentle criticism if you want. Also, if you are trying to critique a poem and have tried your very best but can't come up with anything you would call 'hard' but they have asked for 'hard', don't worry too much, as I'm sure they will appreciate some 'soft' feedback too. 'Hard' just means they are prepared to take whatever criticism you've got for the poem. (Within reason of course--everyone is expected to be kind and try to give positive feedback along with any negative).
FogCat
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/bottom-of-bottles
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism, emotional response, objective response,
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: yes please
Style: free verse
Description: Love, life, alcohol - subconscious memories.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/i-dreamt-of-water
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism
Level of Feedback: (deep breath) hard
Rating: yes, please
Style: free verse
Description: Love and loss.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-poems-of-my-life/34667
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism
Level of Feeback: Hard
Rating: If you want
Style: Free verse
Description: Wishing and believing.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/fall-into-hell/37375
Type of Feedback: Constructive crticism, emotional response, general impression
Level of Feedback: Hard =)
Rating: Yes please
Style : Free verse
Description: Someone who has been betrayed by someone that they love, but no matter how much that person hurts them, they forgive them in the end.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/black-circle
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism, emotional response, objective response on any of the pieces in that thread.
Level of Feedback: Hard
Rating: certainly
Style: free verse, abstract,
Description: A compilation of some of my writing from 2 years ago, most of it is quite short and to the point, I'd like to hear what people think of it, I don't want a focus on any particular poem, just any of them you like.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/my-poetry-1
Type of Feedback: any. say what you deem appropriate
Level of Feedback: again, whatever you want.
Rating: if you wants
Style: it depends. i've posted all my current poems on that story as chapters, so :) read if you want. some are romance, some are depressive, etc.
Description: all my poetry so far :D
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/secrets-discovered
Type of Feedback: Constructive Critisism... just make it helpful really...
Level of Feedback: Be as harsh as you want...
Rating: Yes please, but say what say which rating was you (in your comment).
Style: Just poetry.. not written to any set form....
Description: Meaningful?? I was extremely angry at the time of writing so... hmmmmm
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/m-o-h-e-g-a-n--l-a-k-e
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism, emotional response, objective response on any of the pieces in that thread.
Level of Feedback: Hard
Rating: certainly
Style: mainly free verse
Description: Another compilation ranging back two years, it contains 14 pieces, which in my opinion improves as it goes on, it is one of my favourite compilations, I'd love to know what everyone else thought of it.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/lue-ky-rowning
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism, emotional response, objective response on any of the pieces in that thread.
Level of Feedback: Hard
Rating: certainly
Style: mainly free verse
Description: New work from August 09.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-hearts-pen-poetry--my-flaw/42633
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism, your interpretations, emotional response (if any)
Level of Feedback: medium
Rating: Go for it
Style: Honestly not sure
Description: This is part of Anna's love poems colab, although the theme of love isn't obvious. I wrote it on the spur of the moment, but I've had the first line in my head for a while.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/slices
Type of Feedback: Constructive and emotional response
Level of Feedback: Lets go for hard
Rating: it's your choice
Style: I honestly don't know the different typse of styles
Description: I wrote this poem after I had a very deep and meaningful conversation w/ one of my best friends... the convo really got me thinking and this kinda just popped into my head.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/when-my-pen-touches-the-paper
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism objective response
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: yes
Style:i don't know the styles but i think it is free verse
Description: lies deception and fake innocence
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/p-h-a-n-t-o-m-e-c-h-a-n-i-c-s
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism, emotional response, objective response on any of the pieces in that thread.
Level of Feedback: Hard
Rating: certainly
Style: mainly free verse
Description: New short pieces of work from September 09
Note - This is a compilation, I don't mind what poem you choose to read and rate and of course I'd be in your debt if you were to read through all of it : )
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-promise
Type of Feedback: Constructive criticism and emotional respone
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: It's the readers choice
Style: I dont know the different styles....
Description: A poem about my life basically.....
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/i-am-5
Type of Feedback: All welcome
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: yes
Style: Simple white poetry, maybe close to a sonnet :D
Description: I dark poem I wrote during one of my "dark times"
URL:http://www.protagonize.com/story/two-doves
Type of Feedback: anything and everything...let me know if the poem makes sense
Level of Feedback: hard/medium/soft all are ok..i need to get better
Rating: if you dont mind
Style: no specific style,
Description: the narrator has a memory of a long lost lover, its all processed in thoughts..narrator tries to forget early on, but cannot get a riddle the lover gave the narrator to follow out of his/her head..its structured like a pirates lost treasure map
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/my-home
Type of Feedback: Constructive (and non-constructive, if you're feeling mean) criticism, interpretations and evoked emotions, if you please.
Level of Feedback: Constructive hard feedback preferred. A nice comment that the poem is good is certainly not a bad thing, but telling me something that could be better helps my writing improve.
Rating: If you feel the desire to.
Style: By large, free verse. Very loose rhyming scheme and intentional poetic devices present. Some basic typography for rhythm effect.
Description: Emotional love poem. Besides that I'll leave it to interpretation rather than telling you what it's about.
URL:
http://www.protagonize.com/story/poem-a-day-2010/67716
Type of Feedback: I want any reactions my reader may have, and any critique and suggestions.
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: optional
Style: elegy
Description : Dragons come down slay humans, and on their way, killing the faith of the people.
URL: http://www.protagonize.com/story/bittersweet
Type of Feedback: Any reactions, I want to know how it made you feel and what it made you think.
Level of Feedback: hard
Rating: yes
Style: I don't really know much about the styles
Description: Sadness and loss. It's quite dark in its own little way....