I meant as in title for the writer positions, but they will do for now.
You're allowed to write descriptions and dialogue as you see fit for the story, I'm just here to make the story- the actual magic will be on your side. Yes, you can contribute some ideas for the plot, but in the end it'll be my decision unless you're really un-comfortable with what I have planned.
If you ever need me to help focus the dialogue in your chapters, feel free to ask and I'll take a look at it.
I'll post the skeleton plot in a couple of hours, along with the main/minor events in each chapter.
Character Bios will also be posted in a few hours, my deadline for that will be 9PM.
Have fun Lune :)

The deadline is 4 hours from now (forgot about time zone differences)

Main Character:
Name: Malukah Dezmona
Birthplace: Romania
Age: 17
Job: Escape driver (owing to skills she obtained while fleeing Romania)
Physical appearance: Up to Lune
skills: Playing guitar, Car Racing (tries to avoid street racing if possible), math
Likes: Racing, Foreign cultures (something she thought about a lot living with her father), guitar playing
Personality: Good natured, eccentric, prideful, a little patient but violent when that patience breaks, not usually honest.Small additions may be made by Lune.
History: Originally from Romania, she left her parents house after killing her father in an attempt to save her mother. Knowing that the police would be after her once the murder became known, she left her mother as planned with all of her fathers money and how to use it without anyone knowing. She then snuck into England, faking her identity.

Supporting character (Malukah's best friend)
Name: Baduna
Birthplace: romania
age: 16
Job: None
Skills: Good at English/Social (Malukah and Baduna help eachother out)
Likes: Music (Trance, Rock)
Personality: Hard to get angry unless something happens to Malukah, loyal, easy to get along with, can read people easily, stubborn.
History: Met Malukah at school when she was at her lowest (age 11), beaten by her father. Convinced that something was wrong, Baduna bugged Malukah until she told her everything. Malukah begged Baduna not to tell anyone about her abusive father. Baduna agreed.

Supporting Character:
Name: Dezmond Young
Birthplace: England
Skills: Mixing electronic music, hacking into facebook/email accounts
Likes; Watching/listening to foreign music/movies, listening to dubstep/Trance, parkour with his friends (and the ladies)
Physical appearance: Up to Lune (please don't make it cheesy)
Personality: A bit of a joker, loves to make light of things, often lazy, clever, doesn't know how to react to anger that well, lady killer but that aspect pushes Malukah away (father experience has led to a distrust of men).
History: Has lived in England his entire life, has had half a dozen girlfriends. He keeps track of what his friends/girlfriends think of him by hacking into their email accounts, doesn't tell anyone that.


Antagonist: Zaharia Dezmona
Birthplace: Romania
Age: 43
Physical appearance: Up to Lune
Personality: Aggressive, a little patient, meticulous, prideful, loves power
History: Was a figure head in the Romanian mob, working of Badunas (Malukah's father) influence in the mob to get higher in their ranks. When Baduna died, Zaharia realized that bringing the killer back to Romania would give him more sway over the Romanian mob.


Chapter one
Malukah is walking home with her best friend through her hometown Bucharest in Romania. As they near Malukah's house, Malukah notices something- her fathers car door's open. Filled with dread, Malukah says that she'd rather not go inside, keeping to herself that her father is likely drunk again.

I gotta think about this a bit more, I'll finish chapter one planning in 30 minutes. Tell me what you think about this so far.

Plot summary: Malukah kills her father and runs away to England. In hiding, she attempts to start a new life- until her uncle arrives, finding people she knows. When her uncle finds her, she and her friend fight him- leading to her friend dying as a means of revenge. Malukah then ends up killing her uncle.

Plot summary is not final, full plot will be up tomorrow. Full plot is subject to change until Thursday, but chapters with plot already in them will be set in stone so as not to drive Lunny insane.

Plot summary: Malukah kills her father after she discovers that the Romanian police will not aid her as they are being paid of by the mob. After being beaten badly by the police and given a warning, she goes home- and kills her bastard drunken father, saving her mother from a few bruises. Panicked, she tells her mother everything and then Malukah runs, not realizing that her father was a part of the Romanain mob. Angry, her uncle (Zaharia) beat Malukah's mother, trying to figure out where Malukah could have gone. Soon, Malukah's mother revealed Malukah's best friend, Baduna. Zaharia then hacked Baduna's facebook account and followed Baduna's/Malukah's email conversations, hoping for a hint to Malukahs location. (This made sure that Zaharia got Malukah's actual location). When Zaharia learns Malukah's location two years later when she turned 19, he traveled to London and tailed her until he saw someone she had an interest in, Dezmond. Zaharia then broke into Dezmond apartment and confronted him, showing pictures of his dead brother. Zaharia then convinced Dezmond to bring Malukah to the apartment for a confrontation. After Malukah arrives, a fight ensues and Dezmond ends up with Zaharia's gun. A decision is forced on Dezmond and he ends up shooting Malukah (A full explanation of why will come when I get there.) Dezmond drops the gun, steps back and falls to his knees crying. Zaharia exhales and grabs the gun, shooting Dezmond in the head. Zaharia looks at Malukah, breathing through bloody lungs and says "Now you know what it feels like to endure the worst pain imaginable."
Zaharia leaves Malukah who then crawls to a phone, calls an ambulance and survives.
Plot summary is not final, full plot up tomorrow. Thanks for your patience Lune.

Chapter one
Malukah is walking home with her best friend (Baduna) through her hometown Bucharest in Romania. As they near Malukah's house, Malukah notices something- her fathers car door's open. Filled with dread, Malukah says that she'd rather not go inside, keeping to herself that her father is likely drunk again. Baduna nods in understanding. Baduna offers to go to her house and go to the race tracks. (Forgot to mention, both characters are rich and racing is really popular in Romania, even with girls). The rest of the chapter is spent at the race tracks, going through as fast as possible with $50,000 cars. When Malukah returns to her house, she sees her mother at the bottom of the stairs.

K Lune, this chapter is just an introduction- it's meant to establish Malukah as the main character and further establish Baduna as Malukah's best friend. It'll explore their personalities a bit and get the tone set. It's also key in getting the audience to really like Malukah and Baduna, but absolutely hate Malukah's father. If you need some more planning for the chapter, I'll add some more for you to go on. Thanks for helping out with this Lune!
Dy3rz

Zaharia is Malukah's crazy uncle.
Baduna is Malukah's best friend (female name)

Zaharia is a figure head (a high end guy) in the Romanian mob. He used Malukah's father, who was high in the Romanian mob, to get even further, obtaining more and more power.
btw, I'm changing Zaharia's motivation to just pure vengeance. Instead, he was really good friends with his brother (Malukah's father) and really wants to see Malukah pay for killing his brother.

Okay, does that make sense?
The names will drive you a little crazy for a bit, but any characters from here on out will have English names to make it easier.
If you do not get this, make sure I know because when we start, there's no going back.
Thanks again Lune

Okay Lune, I'm actually not completely decided if Zaharia is going to kill Malukah. Right now, I'm actually thinking that he's going to get vengeance by killing someone that Malukah loves.
Anyways, that's for the future- Zaharia is just pissed. He wants revenge, as of now that is the sole reason. Really, that's all we need and this'll keep the story more focused for the reader.

1. She just wants to avoid her father whenever she can.
2. His abuses roughen her up, giving her the ability to kill her father.
3. Malukah is definitely more confident, but she lets her anger get to her, when that happens she tends to listen to Baduna more.
4. Malukah knows nothing about the mob, she just knows that her father is a crook but knows that if she brings it to the police, her mother won't forgive her- the problem is that her mother still loves her husband.
5. You can introduce the father if you want, but make him a real dick. For instance, have him drinking a beer while saying "You're mothers laying by the staircase."
6. You can offer some backstory to Malukah in the first chapter, especially if it's about her and Baduna's friendship.

Okay, for the car part you don't actually have to say too, too much.
Names of Rally Cars:
-Subaru Imprezza
-Mistubishi Lancer
useful terms: 0-100 in %%% (how fast the car can go from 0-100 kilometers an hour)
Laptime: How fast it takes to go around the course once, obvious but didn't know if you knew

If you have other questions, feel free to ask as many as you want
dy3rz

btw, any other questions I won't be able to answer until late tomorrow, which is about 10PM Mountain Time, so 22 hours from now.

Lune, found some time.

It's just a race track that you can pay to race on,
no, you don't need a crew for rally racing- it's basically offroad racing in whatever vehicle you currently have. That said, cheap cars are permitted- it's usually racing against the clock. The whole racing thing is to help set up the characters abilities for later on in the story, along with fleshing out their personalities a bit.

In rally, there are two people- the driver and co-driver. The co-driver reads of a map and tells the driver what's coming up ahead, ex: Right 1 (A really easy corner) Right 6 (Hairpin corner, very difficult to take), small crest (Crests are risings in the road that sometimes propel the car into the air.)
If any damage occurs in a race, then they can take it to a shop.

Any other questions?

Update 1.1


Main Character:
Update 1.1
changes: Added characters motivations (below Personality in each character), Romanian mob summary info + culture, changed how Malukah learned her driving skills, added in which characters are static and which are aren't- stages for personality development will be added later for non-static characters. Updated Zaharia's history.
Plot summary will be added as a second update in 8-12 hours.




Name: Malukah Dezmona
Character type: Spherical
Birthplace: Romania
Age: 17
Job: Escape driver (owing to skills she obtained while fleeing Romania)
Physical appearance: Up to Lune
skills: Playing guitar, Car Racing (tries to avoid street racing if possible), math
Likes: Racing, Foreign cultures (something she thought about a lot living with her father), guitar playing
Personality: Good natured, eccentric, prideful, a little patient but violent when that patience breaks, not usually honest.However, her old friendships mean a lot to her, so her last link to Romania, Baduna over Facebook, has reinforced Baduna as her best friend, giving her support when she needs it. Small additions may be made by Lune.
Motivations: Wishes to escape her past life in any way possible, especially by establishing a new life.
History: Originally from Romania, she lived in her parents house with her drunken, abusive father. At the age of eleven, her uncle gave her the opportunity to run away with ten thousand dollars. Malukah refused- she just couldn't bear to leave her mother and friends behind. At the age of seventeen, she saw her father beating her mother again- her mother told her not to, but Malukah didn't care anymore. She didn't care what her mother wanted. With a fit of rage, she ended her father before he could end her mother. Knowing that the police would be after her once the murder became known, she left her mother as planned with all of her fathers money and how to use it without anyone knowing. She then snuck into England, faking her identity.

Supporting character (Malukah's best friend)
Character type: Unknown, wait for update 1.2
Name: Baduna
Birthplace: romania
age: 16
Job: None
Skills: Good at English/Social (Malukah and Baduna help eachother out)
Likes: Music (Trance, Rock)
Personality: Hard to get angry unless something happens to Malukah, loyal, easy to get along with, can read people easily, stubborn.
Motivations: Is saddened by the loss of her best friend and feels that supporting her is the best way to make up for what she can't help but feel was a failure on her part, which she understands is silly but still can't shake that feeling.
History: Met Malukah at school when she was at her lowest (age 11), beaten by her father. Convinced that something was wrong, Baduna bugged Malukah until she told her everything. Malukah begged Baduna not to tell anyone about her abusive father. Baduna agreed.

Supporting Character:
Type of character: Round
Name: Dezmond Young
Birthplace: England
Skills: Mixing electronic music, hacking into facebook/email accounts
Likes; Watching/listening to foreign music/movies, listening to dubstep/Trance, parkour with his friends (and the ladies)
Physical appearance: Up to Lune (please don't make it cheesy)
Personality: A bit of a joker, loves to make light of things, often lazy, clever, doesn't know how to react to anger that well, lady killer but that aspect pushes Malukah away (father experience has led to a distrust of men).
History: Has lived in England his entire life, has had half a dozen girlfriends. He keeps track of what his friends/girlfriends think of him by hacking into their email accounts, doesn't tell anyone that.


Antagonist: Zaharia Dezmona
Type of character: Static (unless we go for a longer story, but, as you're writing it, your call)
Birthplace: Romania
Age: 43
Physical appearance: Up to Lune
Personality: Aggressive, a little patient, meticulous, prideful, loves power
Motivation: As a part of the Romanian mob, he is expected to get revenge if any member of his family is killed- no other member of the mob is allowed to do so to avoid disputes. If he doesn't get revenge, then he is deemed not strong enough to be a part of the mob and can not therefore aid his brothers in crime when it counts. Zaharia has also had no strong love for Malukah, usually ignoring her if he could.
History: Was a figure head in the Romanian mob, working of (Malukah's father) influence in the mob to get higher in their ranks- it was a close brotherhood, built of living on the streets for most of their childhood. When Malukahs father got married, Zaharia saw something change in Malukahs father- soon after, his wife was pregnant. Four years later, Malukahs father started drinking and Zaharia realized the stress of being a father and a killer was too much for him. Zaharia on multiple occassions offered to take Malukah to a foster home, or even his own home but Malukahs father refused. When Malukah turned eleven, Zaharia gave her the chance to run away with ten thousand dollars in the hopes that his brother could relax a little bit. When Malukah refused and wouldn't tell Zaharia why, he began to hate her. Zaharia gave up and when his brother died at the hands of Malukah, something snapped- he had to make her suffer for what she did.

The Romanian Mob:
-The Romanian Mob has been operating for half a century. In that time, they have adopted a series of tenants from across the world. The most famous of which is blood avenges blood- specifically, if a member of their organization dies, the killer must die as well. This has led to the Romanian police force refraining from lethal violence against the mob in almost every encounter.
-A second tenant they have is that if a member dies, if he/she has family in the mob, they must be the ones to act out vengeance. This keeps bloodshed to a minimum, if possible.
-The third tenant is that the father of the mob is the only one who can tell the mob to stop killing eachother if a war does break out. In 1983, a war inside the mob broke out, resulting in seven mob members dying, aided by the Blood Avenges Blood tenant.

I'll be doing some planning for the 2nd chapter today.
Sorry that the plot outline isn't complete yet, but I'm hitting a temporary wall. I'll let you know when I gots it.

Chapter 2
Human

Introduction: The startdone from the fathers point of view. It'll start of with him taking the clip out of his gun, ejecting a round from the chamber and placing all of those items on the table. He breaks down sobbing as he recalls part of his past. He remembers running through a market with his brother as kids, chased by police. They climb to the top of a building and are quickly confronted by a cop, who grabs Zaharia. The cops face is distorted but a gun is visible, pointing at him. The cop points to Darens (Malukah's father, also Zaharia's brother) chest with his gun, asking them to give it back. Zaharia elbows the cop in the groin and as he keels over, Daren tackles him, pushing the cop four stories to the ground.

Daren, back in the present, stands up and calls for Malukah. Daren yells incoherently about where his brother was, he begins blaming her for not picking up the phone. This bit of dialogue begins to blend with a bad drug deal that had gone down, sending one of his boys to jail.
This is now back to Malukah. Darens dialogue is so incoherent, that Malukah finds herself truly scared. She locks herself in her bedroom with her mother. Her mother soon begins pleading with Malukah to let her talk to Daren. (Mothers name is now Aglaii, she won't be mentioned too much so hopefully you will not have to remember another name.) Aglaii pushes past Malukah, unlocks the door and is soon held back by Malukah. The door open, Malukah struggles with her mother, knocking over a dresser. Daren hears this and walks to the room they were hiding in. When he walks inside, he throws a bottle of beer at Aglaii (it does NOT shatter). At this point, Aglaii forces Malukah of her, running to hug Daren. He pushes her to the ground and yells at Malukah. As Malukah tries to defend her mother, he takes his gun out, roaring in a drunken rage. He fires a round near Malukah. She falls to the floor, faking her death. As Daren begins to beat his wife, Malukah grabs a nearby lamp- and cranks her father as hard as she could across the head. Daren falls to the floor and stops breathing. Malukah's mother screams at her to get out. A torrent of rage errupts in Malukah, she screams at her mother for being a complete and total moron, asking her what would have happened if that drunken ass continued. Her mother breaks down crying over her husbands corpse.

Malukah remembers little of when she leaves the house- she takes the keys to her fathers car and leaves.


Note: This chapter is really freaking dark, I know. The next few chapters are going to start lightening the mood a bit, but how much I can plan lightening those chapters up all depends on how you interpret and write this chapter. It'll be a hard one to write, I won't lie. After this chapter, I'll begin to show in the plot Malukah's unwillingness to quit as part of her character arc. Along with that, she will develop a dark side as she dables in crime, mostly as a way to get out some of her anger. When she arrives in England, she'll be really pissed.
That's where Dezmond comes in. He'll become a major character as he gets closer to Malukah, healing certain aspects of her character. Malukah at a point will tell him everything that's happened to her. At this point, she'll gain an invaluable friend that she can trust who is not half the world away.
Not to mention, Dezmond will act as comic relief to lighten the story up a bit so it's not a depressing story, rather more of an engaging one.

I still got a lot of work to do on this and this chapter puts the entire story in danger of crashing. But, it's a risk I'm willing to take- if we pull this chapter of right, we can make one hell of a story. Because it's risky, I'll help you with this ones dialogue.
Thanks Lune
if you have any questions, please ask