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Oh, and Moo, it's not the climbing out of the aquarium tank that's the problem, it's the part where the glass breaks and water comes pouring out with great speed and strength. Everyone who doesn't hold on to something strong quickly will get pulled out and cut themselves in the broken ends of the glass panels or the shards of glass that were washed away.
About Eliana, she does know about the cove from Fern and from the warlock, and would probably check it out first. However, by then she will have her powers (she can put people in a trance by singing) and the warlock's to back her up, so she would be more capable of defending herself, no?
She could get information out of them, find out where the merfolk are and go there anyway. I just think putting her in the same tank would make things unnecessarily complicated, there is already too much going on.
Right. So after they escape Elliana will come.
To make things more interesting, I imagine them in a super advanced aquarium (which means that it's mostly controlled by computers) recently built by Mr. Fischer. It's supposed to open in a few weeks, and he is thinking of showcasing the merfolk on the inauguration day.
In the aquarium, there is one of many unused rooms; it's a kind of unfinished lecture room with a huge tank in display at the front. That's where our characters could be.
What do you think?
After doing what she did, Alex is filled with regret and sketches out a plan to save the merfolk. She begins by acting differently around her father, making him think that she found the merfolk for him and that she changed her mind about him, things like that, to gain his trust. Then, when she gets the chance, she sneaks into the control room, barricading herself there, and starts to mess up with the controls to create a distraction and do everything else she can to facilitate the merfolk's escape.
When Owen and Marina are arguing, for example, she can make the lights go out. Fischer's hired humans will go and try to fix them, thinking it was due to the storm that is raging on outside, leaving our characters unguarded.
Merfolks can see in the dark, so Owen and Marina will continue arguing (the argument possibly fueled by the sudden lack of light) and the glass scene will happen.
How about, to show the readers and the characters his suporiority over them, Fischer changes the temperature in the water? To either really cold or hot. It might build tension.
How about Fischer doesn't know that the mermaids can change into humans and that's why he didn't count on them smashing the glass and climbing right out of the tank? Otherwise he could have just locked them up into a normal cell after forcing them to change back into humans, which would have made it harder to escape.
Can we make it so that the mermaids send Aya back in time to check out how she betrayed them so they can avoid Walter better next time and base their plans against how they got betrayed and be more careful in that specific area next time?
Unless you've got other ideas for revealing it, which I'm fine with ;)
The Aya idea is good.
The siren myth? Never heard of it. I will go have a look.
Just to say, I am leaving to go on holiday later today. There is a wifi connection but I have to pay. Depending on how much, I will get it but my mum doesn't want me wasting my money on it. I will try. I will be back early on the 18th. Please continue, even if I can't get on. If I can, I will post up late tomorrow night to say. If not, sorry.
These ideas sound good. Is Firebird going to go next? Or will we wait a little longer for Skooch?
Is that everyone? Firebird with Fern, me with Cindy and Marina. Skooch with Denver and Owen and Moomoo with Aya.
Have I got that right? I a, just trying to organise my thought on what is happening.
It would be a great tension builder because the fluctuating temperatures would make them all fidgety and irritable, that I agree, but I don't think it would be the right choice in this case.
@Moo, yeah that's the idea, that Mr. Fischer doesn't know they can change into humans. Otherwise, they would have a crisis on their hands and the situation would be completely different.
As for the readers finding out about the accidental betrayal, we could also make the characters all agree that, obviously, Alex betrayed them on propose. Then, during the escape, Alex can use the speakers in the aquarium to explain and apologize.
The Aya idea sounds good too though.
Just joking, you should enjoy your holiday. Hope you have lots of fun.
We'll behave while you're gone and continue the story as you asked :) Oh, and yeah, you've got it right, the characters and the readers they belong to are correct.
Hmm... I kind of like both ideas... Maybe have Aya go back in time and see what happened. Then, during the escape, Alex desscribes it from her point of view. Is that ok or too confusing?
Hahahaha! I hope I won't be offline... I will. Looking forward to it. Two whole weeks without the rain. Just sun! Whoopee!
Ok. That's good :-D
Ok. Good. At least I'm getting one thing right!
@elf I think just choose one; Aya would be able to see it from Alex's view anyway, because she isn't arguing against her and likes humans anyway :)
About the temperature changes, I don't really mind either way. Your pick. :)
Yay holiday! Bet you're so excited! Have fun!!
Sorry I haven't been on! I've missed y'all. :-)
I was grounded for a while because I didn't do my math homework (don't even get me started. I literally cried doing my homework I was so frustrated, so I didn't feel like doing it anymore. I really hated that class and that teacher...) anyways, needless to say, my parents were REALLY mad about it. And then after I was ungrounded, I was really busy. But things have slowed down now, so I can finally get back to writing. (yay!:-)
It is 3:22 am here, so I should probably get to bed, but I have read all of the comments and I will try to read all of the new chapters tomorrow. After that, if I have any questions I will ask, and then I will work on a chapter to put up. :-)
Again, sorry for being away so long, and it's good to be back. Love y'all! :-)
Maths, I understand ;) Well, welcome back!
3:22! Goodnight then ^-^ Sweetest dreams ;)
Ok great! Well, no rush: there's still a few other people to go ;)
<3 Love you too!
What do you guys think? :)
Night night!
Yeah, that looks ok. We should go check on Shallys profile. I gotta go now. So I will later.
Sorry about your math homework ordeal. Something similar happened to me in the 7th grade with my Moral and Civic Education teacher, so I can relate; I detested the woman and everything that came out of that lipstick stained mouth of hers, and one day I just had enough. Hope it turns out well for you like it did with me.
What exactly don't you like about that math teacher of yours? Sometimes just talking about it helps.
@elf: So, it's my turn to write? Well, then, I hope it turns out well. I'll write it today after lunch. Wish me luck!