Planning & Brainstorming

Yup. That is what I prigs ally planned. That is fine. We can decide it when we start telling abou our past...

And @MooMoo: that's fine that you asked. And yup I agree give her five days.

I make it sound like a prison sentence or something ;P ... "I'll give you five days and if you haven't journeyed by then your fate will be sealed" LOL...

Well, I meant if Shally is busy, we'll just get someone else to write the chapter instead, hence moving the story onward. :) not replacing her or anything :P just filling in for her temporarily.

By the way, sorry if I don't reply to anything next week. I'm away :) And I just realized timezones are different so for you it probably wont be next week tomorrow ... I'm so confused now ;) I think because where I'm going it's different but starts out right?

I've written that on my profile too, if anyone hasn't read this comment yet. :)

Oh, by the way, about that gene thing. I think that the only reason they have the recessive gene is because their ancestors (one of them, not all) (or maybe two or four) had married a mermaid and had a child? because otherwise there is no valid reason for having such a gene ... Or it could just be one of those odd genes which pops up in random families for really no reason at all :D

We can decide it as we go along! and thats fine. I have only just got my computer working it will probably only work for 5 mins though... but i will try and fix my chapters. We will wait till you get back and if Shally hasnt wrote then we will ask for someone to fill in for her.

Oh no, you don't have to wait for me :) by all means, keep going without me! I'm happy if you do that. But I don't mind you wait, either. So I'm fine with both. :)

Yay! Your computer is finally working!

PS I can't wait to go...just last minute Protagonize checkups :D

I'm SSSSSOOOOOOO sorry I haven't written! I've been so busy with school. High School is harder then I thought... I haven't had much time to be on, and don't think I willl, but I will try to get on at least once a week. Agian, very sorry, and I'll go post now!!!=)

Helloooo I'm back everyone ;)

It makes me think of; "Honey I'm home!"

;D

@Shally16: That's okay, I know how you feel, I'm in school too.

I'm relieved, though, that you finally replied. I really don't want this story to die out, so, please, post your chapter as soon as you can :)

@MooMoo: Welcome back!

Thanks! Missed me? ;P

So did anyone post a new chapter while I was away? If not, don't worry, I understand. We all have busy schedules :)

Posted! =)

I don't want this story to die out either. Thanks for having patience with me. I'll try toget on more often.

And as for the story, I love all the ideas presented. I also thought that at school, Marina tries to pretend that she doesn't know either one of the guys. She keeps trying to ignore them, but Denver keeps picking on her.

@Shally16: yip certainly interesting. I will ask her tomorrow on the way to school.

@Everyone: inorder to continue I think we need to know our characters backgrounds-how they became mermaid/man (born in sea or on land) how they found there power, there family and stuff like that.

I will post up a chapter just now.

Oh no! @MooMoo, you have to help me out!

It looks like one of us should post a chapter next.

Do you want to post it? Or do you think it should be me? Either way we should help each other out, because your character (Aya) is supposed to be nocked out. Will she wake up then? What will happen? What are your ideas?

Hmm... I think you should post it. Maybe you could put me down first, explain what happened and tell your story. Then I could wake up and tell my story.

My waking up wouldn't be too spontaneous though. I think at the end of your chapter I start to stir then wake up fully.

Do you think that's good?

I'm not sure... because the last chapter ends with both of them going down - together. So that won't do...

I know!

What if Fern takes her to the water and she starts to stir, accidentally transforming into a mermaid (she is new to the whole transforming thing, after all). Then, while Fern is trying to digest the new information, he hears the other's voices and goes down with Aya, who, by that point, is starting to fully wake up...?

What do you think?

You're right. I think that is a wonderful plan :) Let's put it into action!

Wait ... Just one thing, though. I'm not sure if she turned into a human yet. But then she couldn't have stepped out of the water... Should I change my existing chapter so she changes forms?

And should Aya start asking a few questions before we hear people talking? Or should we hear it straight away?

Because if she asks a few questions, readers will know more information about the character or story, and Aya will be fully conscious by the time voices are heard, so she'll be walking with Fern.

I think you should ask questions first. I agree it would seem better for the reader.

No, @MooMoo, you don't need to change your chapter, it was pretty much implied that she transformed (like you said, she couldn't have stepped out of water otherwise).

And, alright, I will make it so she asks questions. I will be posting my chapter then. Wish me good luck ^_^.

Okay, I'll wish you luck ;)

"Good luck Firebird!"

:D

I was thinking...

The story has been going great, but there is one problem: the only people reading it is the writers. If we want more feedback we need other non-writers to read it.

Well, that's just me :D

I agree completely. We aren't writing just for us.

And I do like to think some people have read it, but aren't commenting or rating, for some reason.

We need feedback!