Planning & Brainstorming

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http://www.protagonize.com/exercise/the-sea-on-land

Here is the link to the story.

I was just thinking how we would get to the point where the mermaids/men are caught.
Maybe we could have them all talk about their past then go for a swim and get spotted or something.
I was also wondering who should write next. I might be slightly busier this week so I might not go on Protagonize that much :(
But my time will free up after:)

Yeah I like that idea. Have them all together and sharing stories, a chapter each and then they go out swimming and say the child's (Kara) father sees us. As he is the leader of the government. Hence she becomes important...

Yeah, good idea. He should be the leader of a government organisation rather than the government itself.

I'm all up for that idea.

The government organisation would be connected to marine life, I presume?

I also would like to know who's going to write next. The next chapter should be the other mermaids/mermen becoming aware of Aya's and Fern's presence, right?

Maybe Kara could be on the mermaid's side, and try to convince her father not to study them.

Or maybe it could be the other way around, and she hates the mermaids because she thinks that when Fern was playing with her he was buttering her up or something, so she tells her father everything that she had observed about Fern. Then, Fern would feel betrayed and cheated, and the mermaids would hate humans.

So then, there would be conflict between the two races, but finally they sort it all out.

Another idea was that at first, the discovery of mermaids was kept to a regional level, until one of them does something which makes them take it to a federal level.

They all blame that one merperson, and the mermaids grow apart. Somehow, in the end everything works out fine again, I'm not sure how...

Maybe we should ask Shally16 to write, because she hasn't yet?

@MooMoo: I liked your first idea better.

Kara is just way too young and too innocent to think and act like that (unless I change her character completely, and that would mean changing the chapters she appears in too), it's just not the way I wrote her... Plus, being so young, I doubt she would create that much trouble for them (why would her father believe her?).

Don't get me wrong, I do like the second idea. But I think that part should be given to another character, not Kara. If you want, she could have a sister or a brother... Or maybe it can be another friend (sort of, anyway) of Fern's. Or another writer can create this character...

Yes, I totally agree. Hmm...if we get another person to write it then it would be easier, because of course, we are all writing a character who is a mermaid, so we'd be on their side and find it hard to write from another point of view.

If we find another person... yes, I think so. It would be very interesting.

But we'll have to ask everyone else first, though, because they might not want another person.

But I agree that it would be interesting, seeing things from a different perspective.

I agree with adding In a human. It WOULD be an interesting point we just need to find someone. Does anyone have any ideas on who might like to...?

And I agree that Shally should right the next one. I will go post up on her profile.

So... forgive me if I sound impatient, but has Shally16 confirmed that she will be the next one to write?

No she hasn't. I have put a comment on her profile but she hasn't replied. I will go and post up again I know how your feeling :)

Well, if she doesn't write by say...five days, we can always get someone else to write.

@elf, maybe VictoriaGlass might like to? I really can't think of anyone at the moment..

What about rhetoric? I've asked her ... I hope you don't mind O.o. I love that thingy! Whatever it is...

I was thinking that maybe some of the mermaids could have been originally humans, and some born that way, because Elf and Banana have already gotten two chapters up implying that, so maybe it would make more sense if it was like that?

Because it was originally the idea that they were human turned mermaid, right?

I would be okay with that, but only if the reason why these humans turn into mermaids is that they have the 'mermaid gene' or something like that, meaning that someone in their family was born a mermaid.