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I have a bit in the climax of my novel where I need my MC to tell their friends that the evil one is coming.

I want to say something along the lines of "They're coming." - short and snappy with lots of impact, but I don't want to say that becuase it is the exact line in Harry Potter when the death-eaters are coming to the wedding.

I know that it's a normal enough line that i could use it too, but i don't really want to sound like i've nicked it.

What to do, what to do?
Hmmm, I hate it when you want to use a line but you know someone else got there first. There's a fantastic line in a book that I've tried to replicate at the end of my story 'The Lady Beatrix', but it's so hard to do, and I'm sure I've done it really wrong!

The line 'they're coming' is one that's used all over the place, though, so I wouldn't feel worried about using it too, if I were you. If you wanted to go for something different, though, because it's quite an overused line, you might want to go for something along the lines of 'ready yourself', 'get out' or 'this is it'. They're all a bit clichd too, I'm afraid...

Alternatively, you could go for the comedy and have the character say 'ohmygod the evil guys are coming!' and then another character go 'nice and dramatic, as ever', or something alone those lines.

Urgh, I don't think I've been very helpful! Sorry! But maybe it'll give you a jumping off point, or at least show you what not to do!

Good luck!
~West x
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Hm... let's see what can my mind thing of.

"Um," MC pauses and looks worries, "Guy's I think we've got company,' he looks at his friends again, "and not the good kind."

"Brace yourselves!" (although slightly cliche)

Mc shivers, "We've got bad company coming." (Erm, kind of bleck)

(And no Jason I doubt 'Phoenix Arise' would work inthis situation *elo sighs and gives up*)

Hopefully you got a little bit of help.
:} Elorithryn

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