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Peyton : there doesn't seem to be a big difference between glare and stare, except a glare has an anger content, where stare could just be curosity, or wariness. I'm thinking that the guards wouldn't be too happy with Peyton's apparent attempt to escape, so I'm going with the second choice:
Two guards glare at you from the open door.
Riley: Hide them behind your back as the guards pause at your door.
Jordon: Scream as something scrambles over your foot.
Peyton [nostrils flaring]: Two guards glare at you from the open door.
Riley: Hide them behind your back as the guards pause at your door.
Jordon: Scream as something scrambles over your foot.
Peyton:
(2)...Two guards glare at you from the open door.
Riley
(3)...Hide them behind your back, when the guards pause at your door.
Jordan
(3)... Scream As Something Scrambles Over Your Foot
I'll update teh first post of this trhead and then go add my post to our story. :}
If anyone wants to do one for Riley, I'd be willing to run with the other author's ideas, if you like.
REALLY good add by Sliphknot8302. I'm more than willing to take reader rough ideas and write a sub-branch based on them. However, Sliphknot8302's add goes beyond a rough "Peyton goes to door, chamber pot in hand, shouts HEY, to lure a guard." Sliphknot8302 essentially wrote a scene. A good scene. If I re-work it, tack on the transition for the next scene, I would be embellishing what doesn't need it. Also, because I'd have to change a scene already good, to make it my own, I'm figuring that might just discourage readers from making the effort to begin with.
Readers uninterested in the sub-branches probably won't be much interested in the main story too. That's a worry.
Sliphknot8302 wrote, wanting to join in. That's what Prisoners needs right now: interest. Maybe, as much as we need readers, we need readers interested enough they want to write for Prisoners.
I've a suggestion.
We wanted readers to suggest ideas for the sub-branches. Those readers would've received credit for their ideas. Why not go the one step further? - Allow those readers to write the sub-branches. We three continue with the main story. We encourage good adds for the alternate branches, such as Sliphknot8302 wrote (essentially a scene already). We review each submission. It'll be like a friendly contest for Prisoners' readers, to add to Prisoners' sub-branches.
What say you both?
So aside form telling Slip to go on and add his chapter, I think I also need to move the story from this group over to the CYOA group. I'll go do that now (before I hunker down to pound out my Faerie Bound chapter).
:} Elorithryn
Riely hides the keys behind her back, the guards glare at Peyton then Jordan lets out an ear splitting scream....
And now what?
Do the guards who were glaring at Peyton suddenly go towards the screaming?
Or is it the guards at Riely's door who go to see what's going on, but can't get in cause Reily had their keys, while Peyton starts a brawl (Molly did tell him to come down if he was able..) *giggles* And what will riely's reaction be? Will she wait until it all calms down or will she get the urge to help the spoiled brat?
At this point I see Jordan as pretty much hyper ventalating about Rats until some one lets her out. She's probably going to start saying things like about how one of her rank shouldn't be in thins kind of cell and yadda yadda yadds... but for the life of her she can't give them her family name or her rank, she just knows she ought not to be treated like commoner scum....
And thoughts form your end would be appreciated. :}
I am thinking...
...Only the world outside Nick's Paradise here has gotten in my way :)
Isn't lovely how we can do that. :}