the description of this story is in the guidance. I have had the idea for a while now and have a plot sorted out in my head. I am working on typing up the next chapter for you to see but it may take a while. Can you please have a read at the prologue and tell me if it makes you curiouse as to what will happen in other words, does it make you want to continue reading? if not, can you please tell me a way to improve it. Your help is appreciated . thank you. Can you post any comments on the story page, not here. Thank you very much for your help.

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