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Would like Critique on my first story?

Would like Critique on my first story?

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posted Dec 21, 2011 by Wolvenrose

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It's only a chapter long so far, but I'd also like someone to see if the alignment is a little off too, it just looks funny to me. :L

But yes, please assess its historical value (around the 1800's) and description it would be much appreciated. :) Thank you.

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posted Dec 21, 2011 by Wolvenrose

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http://www.protagonize.com/story/a-thousand-paper-cranes

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posted Dec 21, 2011 by NiikiNano

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@Wolvenrose From what I read, it's pretty good. Although I looked up when the Japanese first came to America and everything I've seen says they came in the 1900s. Not the 1800s. The alignment is off. Sentences seem to be split and moved down.

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posted Jan 8 by Wolvenrose

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@NiikiNano

Thank you :)

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posted Jan 8 by NiikiNano

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@Wolvenrose no problem. (:

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