Hope this isn't overloading anyone, but I would appreciate if someone would give me constructive criticism on my story. I'm trying to deviate a bit from the conventional love story and write something emotionally explicit and powerful.

http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-legends-of-ward-16

Thanks for the support!

Hey :D This is one of the first stories I posted here, and also is the only story I have ever finished. But it never got much feedback or ratings, so please check it out. I handed a chapter in for my English Language coursework and got an A, which at A level is as high as you go, but I'd like feedback on here.
http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-taste-of-blood
you should also check out my newest collaborative story
http://www.protagonize.com/exercise/the-forgotten-realm
it's got some really talented writers on there.
Thanks!!
Stargazer.

Please take a look and a little guidance! Please. I'm also would be interested in reading on of the stories u want me to read.

http://www.protagonize.com/story/solar-storms-destruction

its a sci fiction with spaceships and an upcoming war :P.
It doese have a few grammarical and speliing errors which I will fix later.
Hopw u enjoy it.

Its a collaborative story about Neptune, a ship in the 1800s. The main character is called Isabelle, but we need more :)

Please check it out and add if you get inspired

http://www.protagonize.com/story/neptune-1

xx

Hey Y'all :)
Check out my story, It's only a few pages long but I'd really appreciate your feedback :D x

http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-inevitable-choice

hey I started writing a book a few years back and wrote the first chapter and skipped the second and third because I hae always got stuck on the ideas that I want to happen in these chapters. I only have the first chapter up here but I have written the fourth to the ninth chapters and would really appreciate if people could give me linking ideas.
the link is here http://www.protagonize.com/story/a-game-of-seduction and if anyone wants to help just drop me a line.
Thanks

Hello everyone!!! I've started my first solo and would love some feedback!!

This is a bit of a strange story, and the writing style is kind of odd, but hopefully interesting!

It's about a small town called Somplace Odd, a place where word-searches are the trend, lime juice is the popular drink, and the citizens are true "characters".

Here's a small excerpt:

"The town did have a name once, but no one can remember it. Sometimes people pretend to understand the faded sign that once proclaimed it; but, still you know, that they can read the sign only as well as you can."

Thanks!!!!! :O)

http://www.protagonize.com/story/someplace-odd-1

The Alphabet Poem

You write a poem where all the words start with one letter of the alaphabet...

http://www.protagonize.com/poem/the-alphabet-poem

You know you want to add to it...

@MrDragon: L M F A O ! I was going to post a collab poem exactly like that. XD

Anyway...I just finished adding all the chapters I have finished for my "book" in the Fury Series.
There's like 5 and they're pretty long.
It's a bit rushed in the beginning too, I already know that. :#
But it gets better! (Hopefully...)

This is the first chapter, which is basically just the introduction (because I epicPhail at writing summaries ^ w ^ b) :
Introduction

. . .

She lives in a fairytale, somewhere too far for us to find; her head's in the clouds, trying to reach those falling stars. She lives in her own little world called her imagination. She has no idea what her condition is, she has no idea I am here to protect her. The creatures from the heights of the heavens are coming to stop the cursed prophecy. The demons from the depths of hell are racing to claim their territory of this godforsaken earth with her as queen. This was not just fate or destiny, like you simple humans finalize it to be. This is my choice and I never have, can, or will regret my decision.

Author's Note The first sentence of the story comes from Paramore's song Brick by Boring Brick. It's actually what inspired me to do the story. Not the whole song, but just that verse of the song. Haha. XD

Next is Part One, In Phyuri's Perspective

http://www.protagonize.com/story/fury-series-book-one--a-fallen-phyuri
http://www.protagonize.com/story/fury-series-book-one--a-fallen-phyuri
(2 links for good luck? XD)

Hey I just posted a new story I have a good general Idea where its going. Its about time getting messed up because of the inventions of time machines and people changing the future and the past so an secret organisation confinscated all the time machines it killed and took the liberty to keep time in a organised manner and fixed all its kinks and problems but unfortunetly the damage was dealt and time is now making several fixed points in time in space to bleed out problems one being on earth in the summer of 2010.

http://www.protagonize.com/story/a-shard-of-time

I hope you read and tell me where I can fix things current;y I'am editing it to make it easier to read :).

COD(e) 76

I don't know what it is, because I made it up on the spot, but if anyone want's to add be my guest:

http://www.protagonize.com/story/code--76

Ducks are bent on destroying mankind. Join the crusade and decide whether you will help your fellow humans fight for another day, or be traitorous by following duck-kind to glory and victory.

Decide the fate of human and animal kind in this all out brawl by following the link:

http://www.protagonize.com/story/attack-of-the-qwacks

I've got quite a few here that I'd like people to check out. All of them are collabs.;) Please read, rate, and comment!!

http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-people

http://www.protagonize.com/story/angels-2

http://www.protagonize.com/story/romantic-equations-behind-the-business

http://www.protagonize.com/story/a-twist-in-fate

The last two were started by me and are very recent so have very few chapters. But wouldn't mind for people to read it anyways. :) Thank you!

Hi everyone :)

I'm new here and I've never let anyone see any of my writing before (a friend of mine encouraged me to come here and share some of my writing) so I am a bit nervous about it! If any of you would like to read my stories I would appreciate any comments and feedback on them as I would like to improve my writing.

http://www.protagonize.com/story/fist-of-mercy

http://www.protagonize.com/story/a-place-for-everyone

Many thanks, Ele

Hello everyone! I am very new here and have started an addventure that I would like some constructive criticism for, feel free to add to it as well!

I'm horrible at explaining stories (which is why I haven't made a synopsis for it yet) but this story is called "Hackers". It's about a group of teenage hackers who are being hunted by the F.B.I. Not sure how else to put it, the link is here: http://www.protagonize.com/story/hackers

Please Please Please, if you want to, write a branch!

Afternoon folks.

I just joined yesterday and was absolutely fascinated by the concept of the "addventure". I grew up practically devouring the "Choose Your Own Adventure books, so I just had to make one of my own. I started my first collaborative piece and would love some feedback on the first chapter.

The story is called Gods and Zombies It's a first-person story about a mythological god and his/her family dealing with a zombie invasion in modern day New York City. I've set up the first chapter so that the first set of branches are to allow another writer to pick a pantheon of gods to choose from and then turn the narrator into a member of one of those families. They can choose between the Greek, Egyptian, and Norse gods.

I hope I started this off right. Please leave me feedback and constructive criticism.

@nickb hey :) I was hoping to get some feedbacks about mu new poem bitter sweet dreams.. the link is : http://www.protagonize.com/poem/bitter-sweet-dreams
thanks

Hi.
I didn't realise this group had this feature on it. Lol.
So if anybody is not too busy I was wondering if anyone could take a look at my new[ish] solo, please. (: I have chosen this because I plan to complete it, which I have fail to do so in my previous solos.

http://www.protagonize.com/story/the-wishing-website

If I'm honest I have taken on quite a cheesey subject full of stereotypes and clich. However, I hoped to change it into something of my own still. Which is why more feedback would be nice.

Hello everyone! I was wondering if people could read any of my works and give me feedback please!

http://www.protagonize.com/author/Anna_Devlin

Cheers.
~Anna