1 year ago

It all happened so quickly one moment Devon , and I where walking down the street, and before my eyes blood explodes from her chest , and she is dead before she even hits the ground. I kneel to the ground and hold her slowly cooling body tightly.

" Devon!Devon,No!" I shout as I feel no pulse.  A little afterwards , paramedics , and cops drop by ,literally pry me off Devon, and pronounce her dead. She didn't derserve to die , why did she die?  I run to my Apartment barely keeping my emotions in check my green sweater stained in Devons blood. I slammed the apartment door shut , I lean agianst the door , and slide down realizing she was gone. Why Devon , she was so sweet, she could do nothing to hurt a fly.

" Why?" I ask to myself , not exactly thinking something would respond.

Something melts from my wall, I nearly jumped out of my skin as this blackened being with firey red eyes with horns that you could relate to a minotaur. 

"Wh.... wh ...... who are you?" I whimper.

" An immortal. Listen clearly."  He says darkly.

" Devon won't go to heaven , She just another soul about to be mine, Leave her we will recieve her. Its beyond your control , will you ever meet agian?  But there is something you can do."  The demon says not exactly not making the most sense but I can grasp what he is talking about , and let him continue the guy who claims to be an immortal waves his right hand a portal of flames appears behind , and his voice begins to revvereberate. 

" Devon lies beyond this portal , Take the word of one immortal. Give you soul to me for eternity , release your life to start another time with her! End your grief with me  theres another way. Release life and take  your place among the fire with Her!" 

Present 

It was an offer I couldn't refuse , and I foolishly followed after the immortal, I've seen Devon once but I couldn't free her , Now I promised constantly that I will see her agian but never do. I'm not even sure if he actually even owns Devons soul, maybe it was lie , now I'm trapped , and I have to do what i'm told I'm a soldier of destruction , and evil. What would Devon think of me now?

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Author guidance for This exercise

A man in love can make stupid decisions like takeing the word of an immortal, an evil immortal.
Please please before you join listen too
Inside the fire by Disturbed, where this idea was inspired from. I would advise also reading the Lyrics over too. Do however avoid the music video its was a littile disturbing.
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Rules
Don't kill a character without writers permission.
give character bio in a comment
please note wether they are evil or good
if you want to be an immortal you have to be a minor one.
Please listen or read the lyrics of the song " Inside The Fire" by "Disturbed"
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Devon
Age: 25
gender: Female
Status: Living, dead
Appearance: Hip length midnight black hair , Completely black Irisis. Is short thin looks closer to 16.Has very pale skin but seems to have a soft light to her skin.
Notes: Loves Eric.She carries a sword made of a metal called starlight. This is because it shines of its own accord and has magic running through it. - Crystalrose

Eric
Age: 26
gender: Male
Minor immortal
Apearance: Dark jet black hair that is spiked but still blows in a breeze, is about neck hight. Brown eyes, Very muscular , carries a sword has spike shoulder pads, intimidating stance , andd figure.
Notes: Listened to the words of an evil Immortal and now is a servant of destruction, Loves Devon.- chimerakiller2

Sakura
Age: 19
Gender: Female
Status: Escaped immortal
Appearance: Light blond hair in a jaw length bob, bright red eyes. Average height, slim, has a scar across her right eye.
Notes: Occasionally overtaken by her evil side, not often though. Will help where she can. - Element

Alexius
47
Living
Ex PI, now a priest.
Gave up detective work after failing to solve the twin disappearances of Devon and Eric.
As a priest he can gain insight into the immortals' realm through meditation, and can even interact on a minor level. Appears in the realm as a ghostly figure.
Seeks to free all the souls trapped by the immortals, even though he knows this is a hopeless task.
Always wears a monk's robe fully covering all his features.- Helfer

Tiresius
No idea how old he is but he is very old
Was the original Tiresias from Greek Mythology and he spent his time in Hades were his soul gained power beyond measure. He is now like a mage with fantastic prophetic powers.
Wishes to rid the world of the terrible evil that plagues mankind.
Likes to wear dull grey robes and carries a wooden staff. His eyes are sunken and he has fading auburn hair. - Nossirah

Name: Z
Age: Unknown
Looks: A Black spiked mask hides everything on his head but his black eyes+mouth and back of his head. His Hair is Spiked back. Wears Leather Jacket and Pants. Metals Boots with a single curved spike on each foot. A Long metal like tail. One black Angel Wing. Carries two black Revolvers.
Personality: Rather cocky, enjoys tortureing souls. Serves a Dark immortal.
Abilites: Can teleport in a tunnel of Darkness (Sorta like Organization XIII from Kingdom Hearts 2 :) ). Really tough skin - Mcglovin


Name: Sylvia
Age: 19
Gender: Female
Status: Minor immortal
Looks: Dark red hair just past her shoulders, bright blue eyes. Tall, slim, and graceful. Carries a sword.
Personality: Likes to be sarcastic, and answer questions with another question, rather than answers. She's sort of good, but has very little compassion for people she considers underneath herself.
Notes: Knows Sakura, but hasn't seen her in a while. -GoldenLilac

updated Apr 5 '10 by chimerakiller2