Concussions, Jumpscares and Morals

Someone gave me a 2.5 rating on my last page, and I was hoping they could write in the comments what the problem is, so I can fix it, thanks :)

Don't knock people unconscious for plot convenience

Not only is this lazy story writing, it's also unrealistic. If the person being knocked unconscious stays asleep long enough to be moved from one location to another, 4 times out of 5, they're going to die. Luckily, this problem can be overcome if the person knocking them out uses a chemical sedative (gas/poison, or a curse, depending on the genre of story), rather than blunt force.

Use the word 'suddenly' sparingly

"Suddenly" doesn't happen when your reading: When you're watching a movie, a monster can 'suddenly' scare you, or a bomb can 'suddenly' explode. When you're reading a book, nothing takes you by surprise. Try to invite a sense of urgency in your stories more creatively: Eg. sharp sounding words, or complex sentences.

Keep your morals relevant

Your main purpose as a writer is to entertain your audience, not slap people around with heavy-handed allegories. If you're a good person, and you have good morals, your characters will be a reflection of yourself. However, since it's a popular trope in fiction to build the story around a certain message, make sure your messages are relevant to the plot. Morals can also be easily ignored if they're stated matter-of-factly (just think of the morals presented in your average religious argument). Present valuable information to your reader and encourage them to think for themselves.

Thanks for reading :) more to come

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