He was sleeping, holding me...so beautiful , so perfect

Hi! It's my very first writing of a scene of a book I want to write.
Here, the girl is sleeping and the guy comes at night & falls asleep holding her and it's soooooo full of love...plzzzzz tell me how is it and also point out my mistakes

I brushed my teeth, turned on the water heater and stepped into the hot relaxing spray. It was heaven. After a long hot shower, I shut the water off, dried away the droplets with my towel, wrapped it around me and got out. Pulling on my cute pink baby doll nightie, I turned on my AC, climbed onto my bed and drifted off to sleep.

I woke up to so to something shivering against me. No, it wasn't something. It was someone. Him. 

Though my room was quite dark, I could still see him as the moonlight filtered through my curtained windows. He was lying on his side, facing me. His head was tucked under my chin, his face buried between my neck and chest. His perfect mouth was parted slightly, releasing warm puffs of air across my collar bones. His strong arms were wrapped tightly around my waist. Our legs tangled together. I was enveloped in his sexy boy smell. I don't think I'll ever be able to put a name on what he smelled like. He smells like...him. So perfect. So beautiful. 

I was holding him too. When did he come? He only had his boxers on. I put my hand on his shoulder. He was cold. I slowly pulled the comforter from our waist and covered his bare shoulder. Reaching for the AC's remote, which I always keep beside my pillow, I turned down the temperature. The time on the AC showed 2:13 am.

Slowly I brushed a strand of his ink black hair from his forehead. He had stopped shivering now. I lowered my head and placed a soft kiss on his forehead before drifting off to sleep again.

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