The True Enemy
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Aria stood up slowly, and stared at what was unfolding around her. Death, destruction... how did it all come to this? Her friends, having come to save her, are now fighting to save themselves. Evie lay on the ground, practically forgotten, like a pretty flower is ignored by a majority of the world. Aria picked her up and whistled to her friends, telling them to follow her.
Everyone followed her, and they ran until they reached the throne room, but Aria immediately noticed something wasn't right: there were no guards here... the princes wouldn't be so blind to send the entire palace on top of her, n0t when there are far worse things in the world?
Everyone ran inside and the sight that greeted them was far from expected, nor was it welcomed: sitting on one of the thrones was a drow elf, wearing a darkened robe and a helmet that concealed his face. He practically breathed magical power, and it was obvious what he had done. Also in the room, eyes gleaming with anger, was Tsir, staring down the vile dark elf sitting on that throne.
"Well, well. Look what the cat dragged in with her." The dark elf stated flatly, not at all impressed over the small band of fighters and rogues that stood before him.
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Aria Kahner
Gender: Female
Age: About 17-18
Race: Human (or at least she seems that way)
Weapons: A thin single edged sword that looks like a mix between a katana and a rapier.
Magic: None (at least not yet)
Class: Bandit (skilled at both combat and thievery, and incredibly agile to boot... sorta like this: http://xeranad.deviantart.com/gallery/?offset=24#/d35lzao)
Appearance: Aria is a very cute girl, dressed in the tattered rags of a peasant garment. Doesn't like shoes (reason being they feel constricting and she it gives her some advantages), and her clothing and skin have dirt and grime on her, but she doesn't seem to mind it. Has snow white hair and oddly beautiful white irises.
http://xeranad.deviantart.com/gallery/?offset=24#/d33lpkw
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Personality: On the outside, Aria is a fun loving and sweet girl, but deep down, she is a very sad young lady. Somewhat selfish and self serving at times, she nonetheless knows the difference between right and wrong and tries hard to do the right thing. Also something of a hopeless romantic.
Bio: Aria Kahner lived most of her life up to this point as a bandit, killing others in order to keep herself alive (and her brother Alastor, who was crippled at an early age). However, that all changed when a mercenary band hired by the royal family of Ixion, the Koles, wiped out her bandit camp and apparently killed her brother. Realizing that she had no one else to look after and love, she fell into despair, knowing then that her life up to this point had been a mistake: regardless of how you try to justify it, thieving and murder were wrong. So now she is on a quest to understand who she is as a person, in an effort to redeem herself from her bloodsoaked past, she intends to remake her identity. And maybe find out who her family really is.
Author: Xeranad
Name: Ray Hartly
Gender: Boy
Age: 168 but looks 16/17
Race: AniVamp (animal crossed with vampire) -- wolf
Weapons: throwing daggers, sythe carried on back
Magic: can turn into a wolf at any point, when a wolf: has very sharp senses, can run faster than a cheater, can beat almost anything mentally and physically.
Appearance: Just below shoulder length jet black wavy hair, with high tufts at the front, bright green eyes, very muscular but quite slim, high cheekbones, looks very intimidation but is actually quite gentle. Wears hunter green cut-off shorts with rips in them, and a plain white vest top (if he's wearing any top at all). If it gets cold, he'll wear a black leather jacket.
Personality: sarcastic, confident, kind, loyal, hates arguments, a surprisingly gentle person, gets angry easily but it goes down just as fast, would put his life on the line for someone he loves, can be very devious.
Bio: was orphaned aged 6, joined the circus aged 9 (didn't perform though), quit circus aged 16 when he "turned". Has had anything he loves taken away do gives no mercy.
Author: dancingshoes14
Name: Evie St.Rose
Gender: Female
Age: She looks around... fifteen but has been alive much longer than that. (412)
Race: Sprite
Weapons: None!
Magic: Healing, wholesome gifts such as growing plants and bringing in good weather, luck and other niceties. Pretty adept and charms and stuff as well.
Class: err... sprite! Woodland?
Appearance: She looks like a rather malnourished child and carries a small leather slingbag from which she pulls an assortment of weird stuff that shouldn't fit in there in the first place. She wears a simple white shift dress and no shoes. She doesn't have wings and looks very much like a human. She has long thin brown hair and green eyes. She wears a wreath of flowers in her hair, which wilt and bloom depending on her mood. She's kind of short say... 4 feet but is proportionate to someone taller, so if there were no markers you would think she were 5 ft3 or something. Oh, by the way she doesn't wear shoes because her feet never touch the ground. She does make walking motions though.
Personality: Rather cynical and pedantic actually, but in the distant third person way. As in, she will be polite but its rather obvious she's being disagreeable. She intentionally provokes the others and is rather possessive of Aria. She'll resort to being horrible to grab attention but feels rather lost amidst everything. Due to her age, she's sometimes condescending to younger less experienced creatures and will express it in said polite/condescending manner. Behaves like a queen and needs everything (white dress, hair, wreath) to be kept clean and immaculate for her princess personality. If made to feel important, she'll definitely pay it back by the truckloads
Bio: She's the sixth child out of nine and could never compete with her siblings. After turning of age, she left the coop and went to find her place in the world but after much wandering, still hasn't found it.
Author: lena-lou
Name:Tsir (pronounced - Seer)
Gender: Male
Age: Looks around 20 (actually is 3,693 years old now) Was born in 2591 B.C
Race:Cursed Egyptian, Death Bringer for the Egyptian god Anubis
Weapons: Carries a silver Egyptian khopesh with beautiful engravings of long ago battles on the blade, it's handle is a bronze/gold mix and is wrapped with black silk. It hangs in a sheath, that is hooked to his belt (which is under his trench coat.) He also carries an ornate Egyptian Dagger
Appearance: Short black hair that is slightly spiked, sharp silver eyes with black flecks in the iris, olive tan skin. He stands at 6ft. tall is skinny with a toned build. Has a scar on his face that extends across his left cheek. Usually wear a long tan-brown trench coat with dull brass buttons and a hat with a black scarf around his mouth. Has dark, almost black, cargo pants. Wears a golden Ankh around his neck, under his shirt, on a small golden chain. (symbolizes eternal life). He has a tattoo of Anubis on his right shoulder blade, another tattoo rests on his lower forearm (mostly covered by his coat though) It reads: "No man. No god. No elder. No prince. What is the claim of age for ones who are immortal? What is a claim of power for ones who defy death? Call me your damnable hunter. We shall see whom I drag screaming to hell with me..."
Personality:His mind revolves around ideas and strategic planning. He values intelligence, knowledge, and competence; expecting the same of others. He often observes the world, his mind constantly gathers information and makes associations about it. Is tremendously insightful and quick to understand new ideas. It is not easy for Tsir to express his internal images, insights, and abstractions. The internal form of the his thoughts/concepts is highly individualized, and are not readily translatable into a form that others will understand. He spends a lot of time inside his own minds, and has little interest in the other people's thoughts or feelings. He has problems connecting with people, often seeming apathetic, aloof, cynical, and distant.
Bio: He was a young servant, serving within the family of the fourth dynasty, the Egyptian Pharaoh Khufu was currently ruling and had started on his ambitious project known as the Pyramid of Giza. (This occurs around 2571 B.C) Tsir grew jealous of all the attention that the Pharaoh was getting, he and the other servants around the palace received little to no reward for their work. This angered him, so he ran off to the mummification room, where Khufu's bandages were being prepared for the time of his death. The priests, who were supposed to be guarding the room, were out gathering the dead of any royal for the mummification process. In the room, Tsir desecrated the Pharaoh's royal bandages and embalming fluid. This enraged the god Anubis (god of death and mummification). The god cursed Tsir to walk the earth, giving a just and fair death to anyone that crossed his path (or he deemed deserved death). Thus he was marked (with the tattoos) and will only be able to die and leave the god's services when he finds a way to redeem and absolve himself of his sins. He never ages, looking the same age as the day he was cursed, making him look about 20 years old.
Author: Anna_Devlin
Name: Elian
Gender: Male
Age: 4500
Race: Elven
Weapons: Long-bow and arrows, Short bladed Rapier, small hidden dagger.
Magic: Minor healing techniques
Class: Hunter
Appearance: 5 foot tall. His pointed ears protrude from within his long, sleek black hair. Elian has a slight build, very slim. However, being elven he possesses unnatural strength and speed. Elian wears a brown tunic beneath a green hunting cloak, along with boots made from the hide of a boar.
Personality: Elian prefers a solitary existence, travelling the land alone with his horse Mera. He has a fierce temper, and is an extremely viscous fighter. However, Elian will not give up on those he forms bonds with, he is incredibly loyal and will go to all ends to ensure their safety.
Bio: 2000 years ago, Elian was branded an outcast by his people and thrown from his city. Soon after he succumbed to memory loss and forgot the reason for his exile. Elian can no longer remember anything of his family or former friends. It has been so long since he was exiled that he no longer recalls the name of his city. He is aware of the fact that he is elven and knows some of the history of his people, such as the fact that the elves have lost most of their magic over the years and now only retain their healing powers.
Author: Colm
Name: Shard Decloak
Gender: Male
Age: 25
Race: Dimensional traveler
Weapons: A gaint sword( five feet long 10 inches from edge to edge) capable of storing elemental/ magic energys and releasing them. Is obsidian black light to shard heavy to all other who try to wield it. Has strange cryptic writing on it.
Magic: Elementa if it could be considered magic, dimensional space manipulation ( knows very little of his powers, and beleives its a form of magic limiting its true power.
Class: The guy who runs in head first and miracoulously pulls through
Appearance: Is six feet tall pale orange hair, has orange eyes with a fifteen under his eyes which is not a tattoo below his eyes. Is very muscular, wears red jacket that he never does up and reaches to his ankles. The jacket also has a fifteen printed on the back and on his right arm. Has a belt hanging from his left shoulder to his right hip that holds his huge sword. wears lightly armoured pants with two interesting knives on strapped to them. Sorta looks like this http://chimerakiller2.deviantart.com/#/d3bte53
Personality: Brave, can be smart but would rather just charge in. Lacks patience and is a hands on learner.stands up for those in need,is very lucky. Happy and condfident, charismatic yet seems to hold something back. can be relatively calm even though is very hot headed.
Bio: Was found on the road after a very stange night and was brought up by a family of 15 farmers. By the age 6 the family knew he was something else with his obsurd strength and the way the elements reacted to him as much as they loved him the could not help but to treat him differently. when he was 8 at battle took place killing his family leaving only his younger adoptive brother that he saved. Together they searched for a way to get revenge and learn to fight. At the age of twelve after being taught by variose soldiers, and stranger he lead a band of kids against the servants of darkness only to lose his adoptive brother two years later. He has learend that revenge will not lead to no good end but still wishes to fight only this time refuses to lead and push anyone.
Author: chimerakiller2
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"A fantasy tale about a young girl, having lost just about everything and have gotten what she had through ill means, now seeks to understand herself and possibly atone for the sins she had committed. Along the way, she meets allies and enemies to her cause, and within the darkness lurk foes who poison and corrupt order: the Seven Shadows, seven masters of the dark. And they will do whatever they can to make sure our heroine never finishes her quest......"
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